A legend's Return, Chapter One

Discussion in 'Pokemon Fan Fiction' started by penguin_master, Dec 16, 2003.

  1. penguin_master

    penguin_master New Member

    Ash was battling wild pokemon at Mt. Silver one day. He was not excited as a Sneasel approached. Ash's Pikachu simply ran up to it and used Mega Kick on Sneasel's face. Sneasel ran away holding it's face in pain. Ash sighed.
    "There is no longer any pokemon that can put up a decent fight." Ash had even thought about leaving Mt. Silver, the place he had made his home, in search of a challenge.
    "You are wrong." The voice echoed of the walls of the cavern. "You may not know it, but there is a trainer more powerful than you. This trainer is, of course, ME!" Ash was in a state of panic, so he shouted,
    "Pikachu, use Flash!" In an instant the tunnel was flooded with light. Ash was filled with consernation as he looked into the tired, worn-looking face of the speaker.............

    Find out who it was in the next Chapter!



    Okay, so what do you think?
     
    Last edited: Dec 17, 2003
  2. HypnosProjectHQ

    HypnosProjectHQ New Member

    A little bit short... that's more like a prelude.
     
  3. penguin_master

    penguin_master New Member

    Ash was battling wild pokemon at Mt. Silver one day. He was not excited as a Sneasel approached. Ash's Pikachu simply ran up to it and used Mega Kick on Sneasel's face. Sneasel ran away holding it's face in pain. Ash sighed.
    "There is no longer any pokemon that can put up a decent fight." Ash had even thought about leaving Mt. Silver, the place he had made his home, in search of a challenge.
    "You are wrong." The voice echoed of the walls of the cavern. "You may not know it, but there is a trainer more powerful than you. This trainer is, of course, ME!" Ash was in a state of panic, so he shouted,
    "Pikachu, use Flash!" In an instant the tunnel was flooded with light. Ash was filled with consernation as he looked into the tired, worn-looking face of the speaker.............
    Ash was staring into the face of his old rival, Gary Oak. Ash was stunned! He thought niobody could be able to make it this far into Mt. Silver, even with strong pokemon. Ash had a sudden thought, what if-
    "Do you know why I am here?" Gary asked in a large voice, interupting his thought. No, I don't know why you are here,or how long you've been here, thought Ash. "It is because I want my final pokemon battle to be more than an easy victory over a new trainer. I want it to be a good battle."
    "What?" Ash gasped in shock. He coulden't believe what he thought he had heard. His longtime rival, who was always so, well, ambitious, would ever stop training pokemon. "Why would you ever stop training pokemon?" said Ash.
    "Did you think," started Gary, "that your coming here would have an unbelieveable affect on another person? Did you think that when you came here 5 years ago, that you would turn away another person's entire family from them? Did you think that it would cause a young man's Grandfather to spend the rest of his life doing research? Did you think that it would lead a young man's beloved sister to... Well, to...her death?
    "All this has happened, Ash. I bet it didn't cross your mind that your leaving could have such a big impact. I happen to know this person. I now him better than I did a long time ago. I know what he will do.
    "I know I said I came to fight my last battle, but also, I want my revenge..."




    By combining the sample and my new piece, I have written Ch. 1. How is it? I will continue this untill the very end.:) Any help or reviews will be appreciated. Thanks for reading!
     

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