My first college paper, I want to share it with you, I WROTE ABOUT POKEMON- I GET 99%

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  1. :eek::eek:YEP I GOT A 99% ON MY ESSAY :eek::eek:

    STOP, DO NOT SKIP STRIGHT TO THE ESSAY, READ EVERYTHING BEFORE IT FIRST

    MODS- IF YOU DEEM THIS WORTHY FOR ANOTHER PART FORUM, FEEL FREE TO MOVE IT


    Yep you read it right I wrote my first college paper and it’s about Pokemon and I want to share it with you.

    Well, first of all, my assignment- I had to pick one of 10 topics and write a 500 word (minimum) essay about it. If I didn’t like one of the topics I could talk to the professor about a different one. I did like one of the topics, but got turned off by one word; you might know what it is.

    If you guessed outdoor you are right. So I ask her if I can ignore the word outdoor and do it on Pokemon and she says yes to both. So I head off to the library after class to start working on it. I got so involved in this paper, I lost track of time and realized that I only had 30 min to save my work, log off computer, hurry across campus to the marketplace (cafeteria), eat and get to my next class. I normally give my self an hour for this.

    After I was done with my classes for that day I headed to the library and finished the paper. Over the weekend I went to 4 leagues, yes 4 and showed people my paper and got feedback/proofreading from them. Then I did some revising on Sunday night. On Tuesday I turned the paper in. Today, Thursday I got my paper back.

    2 funny notes-

    Look at this screen shot, http://s190.photobucket.com/albums/z139/ACASP13/?action=view&current=powerpointenglish.jpg, this screen shot is of a PowerPoint she showed us in class. Read the last bullet. When she said this in class I was laughing on the inside, saying to myself….. SHOULD I DO MY ESSAYS LIKE THIS? In case you were wondering NO I DIDN’T TURN MY PAPER IN LOOKING LIKE THIS
    Also, for you guys on AIM who talk to me (Mainly People from OMAR CHAT)- Spell Check was most definitely the play for this paper and all my future college papers.

    Before I get to my paper I just found something else about this assignment today. See in this course requires 5 500 word essays (10% of final grade, each), 1 Term Paper (30%), and Participation, Assignments, Test, Quizzes (20%). I thought this was one of the 10% essays, it wasn’t, this was because it was our first paper. I found this out after class today when I asked her the grade I got on it; the returned paper had no grade only comments. Scroll over the quote box below for the Professors comments if you want to read them now, if you want to read the comments after you read the paper scroll over them later. The Professor then told me that she will count this has a grade on an individual student bases, so if someone liked their paper and will think they will get a good grade, have the Prof count it, If a student doesn’t like their paper and know they will get a bad grade on it, they don’t count it. I think I am going to count it.

    Why that long winded last paragraph was important- I don’t have a grade on it yet, so don’t ask what I go on it. Here are the Proffesor’s comments, read now, read later, your choice.

    Now that I got your attention, a serious note-

    As I was writing this paper, I was thinking about other players, why they play and the attitudes they show while playing and not playing this game. Pokegym- your “assignment”- Before you read my paper take a minute and ask yourself why you started to play this game. Then read the rest of the “assignment” below the essay


    (Note there are errors my Professor caught, not editing this to show exactly what I turned in. Also excuse the bad formatting of the essay, the vBulletin system is preventing me from putting an indent in the paragraph)

    Here is the essay and topic if you frogot what it was


    Now Pokegym- Ask your self why you still play this game, how has the game positively affected your personality and life and negatively affected your personality and life. Take the time between now and Battle Roads to reflect on those positives and negatives and determine what you have to do to make those positives aspects come out more and make those negative aspects disappear.

    Pokegym- Please don’t post any thing of a flaming or bashing nature, this post if meant to reflect on the past to better the future. Lets have a good season, good luck to all.

    -THE FT. LAUD. LOUD MOUTH.
     
    Last edited: Sep 25, 2007
  2. jkwarrior

    jkwarrior New Member

    I thought about giving a speech in my public speaking class about pokemon, but I don't have the courage. :smile:

    Cool essay.

    I'm a little confused about one thing. Do you want advice on whether you should decide to use it for one of your graded essays?
     
  3. PSYCO829

    PSYCO829 New Member

    very nice anthony
    you wrote a paper about pokemon that wasnt in all capsand it was well thought out and meaningful
    well done
     
  4. Burninating_Torchic

    Burninating_Torchic New Member

    Darnit, I was off by one.
    Your spellcheck missed four spelling mistakes:
    -Others (you said other)
    -Manga (you said magna)
    -Than (you said then)
    -One (you said on)
    I had guessed five. =(

    But I think you should focus more on punctuation than spelling. Some of the punctuation in parts of that paper was... well, bad.
    Nice paper though. Hopefully you'll do well on the rest of your papers in college.
     
  5. doctormcdreamy

    doctormcdreamy New Member

    if i was grading this paper, i'll give it an A+.
     
  6. Chromecatz

    Chromecatz New Member

    You should use higher vocab anthoy.
    Also i think you should start an outside activity XD
     
  7. homeofmew

    homeofmew Active Member

    I once did a Paper on Pokemon State Championships along with the topic of Mr. Johnny Kettler. I got an "A" on it.
     
  8. Mew*

    Mew* Active Member

    Yay!

    That was great! I'M HAPPY YOU STOPPED TYPING LIKE THIS. I didn't know that you could be such a decent person. :tongue:

    That was an impressive essay. Hope you do well! :thumb:

    EDIT: Woah! I had it at size 7 and the text was huge. Had to reduce it so that it isn't spammy.
     
    Last edited: Sep 6, 2007
  9. Lakak

    Lakak New Member

    d(^^)b

    nice essay, only one of our own could do it :p
     
  10. Jason

    Jason New Member

    GOOD JOB, ANTHOY, THE ESSAY lS REALLY GOOD. I HOPE THE COLLEGE WILL GO ALL WELL FOR YOU.
     
  11. JokerBoi

    JokerBoi New Member

    I plan to major in english and literature and as much as I want to give you pointers I dont want to be considered bashing. But overall this is nice to see coming from you Anthony, I plan to do a video on pokemon for my media production class this year.
     
  12. Regis_Neo

    Regis_Neo Moderator

    Great essay imo. Your essay reflects much of how I feel about the game, except that I was 11 when the TCG came out and that I was more into the video game aspect than the TCG part. But yeah, very nice essay.
     
  13. FriedBlaziken

    FriedBlaziken New Member

    im surprised that the essay wasnt in all caps lol
    anyways nice essay
     
  14. ilikegengar

    ilikegengar Member

    Very good paper. I'm happy to see a college-age student proud of Pokemon.

    I'm happy you mentioned that parents play pokemon because their children do. My husband and I learned because our son wanted to play and he couldn't read at the time. I remember sitting on the living room floor reading the instruction manual that came with the base theme deck. I looked at my husband and said, "this is a complicated game!" From there we built a deck with the deck help sheet on the back of the player mat. That was 8-9 years ago now. "Bill" is still my favorite trainer. We play Pokemon as a family. It's an event where kids of all ages, parents and grandparents can play the same game and have a fun time. We rarely go to an out-of-town event without taking several neighbor kids with us.

    You mention scholarships several times. I don't think that's why people play the game. A scholarship is nice, but rare. They are only given out at select events. I think kids play for the other prizes: the packs of cards, a 'winners' pin, the joy of being in the finals!

    Make Pokemon an outdoor event: play on your front porch! I hear that a NW Battle Road had to take the finals out to the parking lot to finish the game as the building closed. Ross got a Victory Medal that way! :smile:

    Thanks for sharing your paper with us.

    Best wishes,
    Nanette
     
  15. rhodesia123

    rhodesia123 New Member

    you really can spell. when you misspell you do it on purpose. your whole life is a lie.
     
  16. No I don't want advice on if I should use this has a graded essay, I am just posting the essay to share it with Pokegym

    Ty

    Manga you got me on, Than/Then was a grammer error, and the other 2 are missing a letter at the end, I wouldn't call it a spelling error, I would call it a misplay

    Ty

    What is this higher vocab? Do you need to get Budew to use it?
    My outside activity is walking, walking to and from a location where I get picked up/droped off for public trasportation

    Nice job

    Ty
    I STILL TYPE LIKE THIS IN AIM

    Vote Lakak
    Ty

    Props from Australia, lawz! Ty Jason

    *Sends future papers to Rob for proofreading*
    Let me be the star of your video.
    Btw does x-tian go to college because there is someone in one of my classes who look just like him

    Normally in life- CAPS LOCK IS THE CRUSE CONTROL TO COOL
    But in college- CAPS LOCK IS THE CRUSE CONTROL.......TO AN F :frown:

    Np, glad to share, thanks for reading

    Back to back posts merged. The following information has been added:

    No I can't spell. Thank Grinder for spell check!!!!! I had to click F7 (Spell check) like every line
     
    Last edited: Sep 7, 2007
  17. Azure Kite

    Azure Kite New Member

    Hey nice essay. I homeschool so I cannot possibly understand what an essay truly is but I'm sure I can get through life without it. Anyway as, ehem....Ilikegengar said you did mention scholarships a little to much because you have to be REALLY (yay I did it!) good to actually get far enough to win money for a scholarship.

    And negatives I've gotten from playing pokemon? lets see....well I met King_of_Magikarps....annnnd.....it drew my time away from more important things...like runescape. But besides that no negatives.
    Positives......I found something to draw my time away from the timekiller that is runescape....I got a reason to come to the gym.....my brother got a hobby.....oh! And it gives us something to do on friday nights. Yup.
     
  18. chriscobi634

    chriscobi634 New Member

    pretty good essay and you have guts in doing this for a college coarse. Now to answer your question: why do I still play the PTCG?

    I like to play the TCG more then the electronic game because of the luck and ban factors. I beileve there is less luck involved in the TCG than the DS game, unless your playing flaridos or any deck that involves a lot of flips. Then for a good metagame to be established on the DS games a lot of bans have to be made. That's not the case in the TCG, maybe before banning cards like Slowking, but it's no longer the case.
     
  19. (TYranitarFReak)

    (TYranitarFReak) New Member

    LOL the society needs more ppl like u to promote pokemon (tcg).:wink::thumb:
     
  20. Azure Kite

    Azure Kite New Member

    Yes as you said it does help you socially, especially if your homeschooled and your not out everyday with people you don't personally know.
     

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