Pikamaster
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You wouldn't believe how easy it is to think up ways for Jack to die.:tongue: I'm waiting for more reviews before I start the next chapter.
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The Legend of Thunder: Updated 6/8 Now truly complete!
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Pikamaster
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I MIGHT. But it seems that they have abandon me completely. ROX BROS, I PROMISE TO PUT YOU IN THE STORY AGAIN. I was going to anyway, but I wanted it to be a surprise. I guess that's ruined now. *Goes and cries* And something new. After I post every chapter, I'd like you to rate it on a scale of 1/10 when you post your reviews, starting this chapter.
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meditite rox
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So you don't even wait a day to see if I'm still reading it? It looks good. Although the three random deaths are weird. How vicious is this story going to be??? *regrets question*
Pikamaster
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You don't want to know. No, I didn't. Give a rating with your review please. Oh, btw, I never said that you woudn't die again. *evil grin* And I've been waiting to wright about killing them. As I said, it was fun, and is fun, to torture my characters.
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Pikamaster
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But it was fun... Expect more random deaths, maybe. *Evil grin*
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charmander rox
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Okay, that was the most random paragraph ever. 7/10, I guess, you really are mean.
Lucario EX
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3/10 You aren't even seriously trying, you just want to torture Arceus999 and the Rox bros. constantly.
Can I be in the story?
Can I be in the story?
Pikamaster
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^Um, I am serious, but I'm trying to make it funnier. Right now, it's pretty boring, in my eyes. I haven't tortured the Rox bros, other then the cliff incident, and how am I torturing arceus 999? The paragraph was just a random thing that I like to do. Yes, you can be in it. PM me with what pokemon you want to (Briefly) be.:tongue: I guess that I have enough reviews to start on chapter 8 now. Fun. I'm going to try to move things along faster, so I don't know how these next chapters are going to turn out. *Hopes that they won't be bad*
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Pikamaster
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O.K. I'm sorry, but chapter 8 is not written yet. I've had to much going on, so even though I pushed the date back from Wednesday to today, I have to push it back farther. I don't know when it will be done, or when it will be posted, but it IS in progress, so it will be up sooner then later. Having writers block doesn't help either, but oh well.
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Pikamaster
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Sorry for the delays, here it is.
After witnessing the deaths of the three legendary Pokémon, Thunder, Spark and Jack returned to camp, and upon returning, started planning how they would break into the airport the next day. “I think that we should just go in and hit everybody with Thunderbolts.” Spark suggested, but Jack and Thunder immediately objected and started lecturing about what would happen if they had a Ground type Pokémon.
“O.K, O.K, bad idea.” The Raichu shouted, not wanting to have the other two tell him how stupid he was. They sat in silence for a while, then, Thunder had an idea.
“How about this” he started “Spark and I capture some Rocket, then Jack can take the uniform and sneak in, find what we need, and get back out without ever being noticed. By the time they find the moron, who we will have tied up and gagged, we’ll be long gone.”
“It’s the perfect plan.” Spark decided “It doesn’t sound so hard either. We just need to ambush a Rocket, what could be easier?”
Of course, Jack didn’t agree “There are a hundred things that could go wrong” he started “And I don’t see you two offering to do the hard part. What if they find out I’m not one of them? I’m not an Eevee anymore, so unless one of you comes with me, I’m not doing it. Why should I help you guys anyway?”
“Reason number one” the said the gold Pikachu, who was starting to get angry “Spark will come with you and pretend that he’s your Pokémon. Reason number two. If you don’t do it, I’ll see how much electricity your body can take before you faint. That good enough for you?”
After that thinly veiled threat, Thunder grabbed the other two as best he could and started in the direction of the airport.
A few hours later, they were lying under a bush, waiting for their opportunity to abduct a Rocket grunt. Seeing a guard who faintly resembled Jack in height and appearance, the Pikachu and Raichu jumped out of the bush and used Thunder Bolt on Rocket, immediately knocking him unconscious and dragged him out of sight of anyone in the airport. Taking off his uniform, they put it on Jack. The black hat fit, but the black boots, pants, gloves and the shirt with the red Team Rocket “R” were all slightly too big.
“Oh well” Thunder said “Unless we kill this one, which would be fun, we can’t get another one, so you’re stuck with stuff that’s to big for you, enjoy.”
Saying nothing, Jack and Spark left to do their task, while Thunder tied and gagged the captured Grunt. “I might as well have a little fun with him while I wait.” he thought to himself as he picked up pebbles to throw at his prisoner.
Meanwhile, Jack and Spark were having a hard time finding the airport’s control room. Luckily for them, the huge, grey hangars were mostly abandoned with the exception of the few Grunts who had been left to guard them. Finally seeing a smaller, tall, grey building at the far end of the hangars, Jack and Spark headed towards it. Entering it, then climbing the concrete stairs, they got to the control room. Walking towards the one Rocket that was in there, Jack decided to ask where Lightning was taken.
“Hey, do you know where Lightning, I mean that Pikachu was taken?” Without turning around, the Grunt answered “Yeah, it was shipped off to HQ back in Kanto” then started eating a sandwich that was made of some unidentifiable meat. Then, Jack made the mistake of asking where HQ was. “If you were a real Rocket” the Grunt said, turning around “You would know that. Muk, make sure that this impostor stays right where he is.” Throwing the Pokeball, he finished turning around, but all that was there was a pair of boots and a swinging door. Starting to run after them, he slipped on his Muk, who had just come out of its Pokeball, and fell backwards onto the control panel, accidentally smashing through the glass that encased the alarm button and hitting it with his head. Of coarse, he got multiple cuts to his head, and as the high pitched whine of the siren began, Muk crawled over to see if the unfortunate Rocket was dead. Seeing that he wasn’t, Muk crawled away, but not before some of his poison seeped into his trainer’s cuts. As he crawled away, Muk realized that he could escape the cruelty of the Rockets and slithered out the still swinging door and down the stairs. Exiting the building, he got outside just in time for the guards chasing Jack and Spark to slip on him and break some bones. Overjoyed at their bad luck, the Pokémon left the airport and entered the forest, crawling past Thunder hiding spot as he escaped the Rockets forever.
But Jack and Spark weren’t so lucky as to escape without some Grunts chasing them. Dodging the Muk, two of the guards chased Jack and Spark until they reached the forest. Getting fried with a double Thunder Bolt, they fell at the feet of the two electric mouse Pokémon.
“Can’t you do anything right?” Thunder angrily asked Jack and Spark as they started to enter the forest “Your job was simple. Get in, find what you need and get out. For almost getting caught you better know where Lightning is.” Once they told the gold Pikachu where she was, he started sprinting towards the nearest human city, leaving the other two the choice of either running some more, or staying behind with the two Rocket corpses.
I have no idea when Chapter 9 is going to get started, so expect another long wait. As always, R&R please.
Chapter 8
After witnessing the deaths of the three legendary Pokémon, Thunder, Spark and Jack returned to camp, and upon returning, started planning how they would break into the airport the next day. “I think that we should just go in and hit everybody with Thunderbolts.” Spark suggested, but Jack and Thunder immediately objected and started lecturing about what would happen if they had a Ground type Pokémon.
“O.K, O.K, bad idea.” The Raichu shouted, not wanting to have the other two tell him how stupid he was. They sat in silence for a while, then, Thunder had an idea.
“How about this” he started “Spark and I capture some Rocket, then Jack can take the uniform and sneak in, find what we need, and get back out without ever being noticed. By the time they find the moron, who we will have tied up and gagged, we’ll be long gone.”
“It’s the perfect plan.” Spark decided “It doesn’t sound so hard either. We just need to ambush a Rocket, what could be easier?”
Of course, Jack didn’t agree “There are a hundred things that could go wrong” he started “And I don’t see you two offering to do the hard part. What if they find out I’m not one of them? I’m not an Eevee anymore, so unless one of you comes with me, I’m not doing it. Why should I help you guys anyway?”
“Reason number one” the said the gold Pikachu, who was starting to get angry “Spark will come with you and pretend that he’s your Pokémon. Reason number two. If you don’t do it, I’ll see how much electricity your body can take before you faint. That good enough for you?”
After that thinly veiled threat, Thunder grabbed the other two as best he could and started in the direction of the airport.
A few hours later, they were lying under a bush, waiting for their opportunity to abduct a Rocket grunt. Seeing a guard who faintly resembled Jack in height and appearance, the Pikachu and Raichu jumped out of the bush and used Thunder Bolt on Rocket, immediately knocking him unconscious and dragged him out of sight of anyone in the airport. Taking off his uniform, they put it on Jack. The black hat fit, but the black boots, pants, gloves and the shirt with the red Team Rocket “R” were all slightly too big.
“Oh well” Thunder said “Unless we kill this one, which would be fun, we can’t get another one, so you’re stuck with stuff that’s to big for you, enjoy.”
Saying nothing, Jack and Spark left to do their task, while Thunder tied and gagged the captured Grunt. “I might as well have a little fun with him while I wait.” he thought to himself as he picked up pebbles to throw at his prisoner.
Meanwhile, Jack and Spark were having a hard time finding the airport’s control room. Luckily for them, the huge, grey hangars were mostly abandoned with the exception of the few Grunts who had been left to guard them. Finally seeing a smaller, tall, grey building at the far end of the hangars, Jack and Spark headed towards it. Entering it, then climbing the concrete stairs, they got to the control room. Walking towards the one Rocket that was in there, Jack decided to ask where Lightning was taken.
“Hey, do you know where Lightning, I mean that Pikachu was taken?” Without turning around, the Grunt answered “Yeah, it was shipped off to HQ back in Kanto” then started eating a sandwich that was made of some unidentifiable meat. Then, Jack made the mistake of asking where HQ was. “If you were a real Rocket” the Grunt said, turning around “You would know that. Muk, make sure that this impostor stays right where he is.” Throwing the Pokeball, he finished turning around, but all that was there was a pair of boots and a swinging door. Starting to run after them, he slipped on his Muk, who had just come out of its Pokeball, and fell backwards onto the control panel, accidentally smashing through the glass that encased the alarm button and hitting it with his head. Of coarse, he got multiple cuts to his head, and as the high pitched whine of the siren began, Muk crawled over to see if the unfortunate Rocket was dead. Seeing that he wasn’t, Muk crawled away, but not before some of his poison seeped into his trainer’s cuts. As he crawled away, Muk realized that he could escape the cruelty of the Rockets and slithered out the still swinging door and down the stairs. Exiting the building, he got outside just in time for the guards chasing Jack and Spark to slip on him and break some bones. Overjoyed at their bad luck, the Pokémon left the airport and entered the forest, crawling past Thunder hiding spot as he escaped the Rockets forever.
But Jack and Spark weren’t so lucky as to escape without some Grunts chasing them. Dodging the Muk, two of the guards chased Jack and Spark until they reached the forest. Getting fried with a double Thunder Bolt, they fell at the feet of the two electric mouse Pokémon.
“Can’t you do anything right?” Thunder angrily asked Jack and Spark as they started to enter the forest “Your job was simple. Get in, find what you need and get out. For almost getting caught you better know where Lightning is.” Once they told the gold Pikachu where she was, he started sprinting towards the nearest human city, leaving the other two the choice of either running some more, or staying behind with the two Rocket corpses.
I have no idea when Chapter 9 is going to get started, so expect another long wait. As always, R&R please.
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Pikamaster
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Thanks. The first one who can tell me what kind of food mesprit's head looks like gets a cookie. Just don't ask why I need to know, I just do.
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Lucario EX
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Strawberry ice cream that fell on the floor?
Pikamaster
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Maybe strawberry ice cream, but I'm going to see if there's anything better. It's going to be fun when you react to why I need to know.
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afstandopleren
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Azelf has a cherry head. Win?
Pikamaster
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Since this chapter is shorter I got it written sooner. Seeing how I put the dialect before and seeing how the dialect for RQO was put, I decided to space mine like RQO. It's easier to read and I just like it that way better.
Dusk was falling and the Pidgeys had stopped singing and gone back to their nests when Thunder finally stopped so Spark and Jack could catch up.
“Well” he asked as they collapsed, gasping for breath, “You think this is a good spot to stop for the night?”
“I think any spot is good as long as we can rest” Spark and Jack said simultaneously.
“Well then, Jack, you get fire wood, Spark, you find food and I’ll find water.”
“Do I have to get fire wood?” Jack questioned “I’m so hot right now.” But as he got his breath back and started looking around, he noticed that the leaves had changed from green to crimson and gold with Pachirisu scurrying about, storing food for winter. And when he saw the murderous look on the gold Pikachu’s face, he slowly got up and started to plod off in search of dead wood.
Spark, in search of food, saw a tree. What was strange about this tree was the fact that it had what looked like bananas growing out of it. Quickly, he called Thunder and Jack so they could see them and eat them for dinner. By the time that they got there, Spark had already climbed up the tree and was slowly walking towards the bananas. Reaching them, he started to pull, but instead of bananas, he found himself holding a weird, sleeping Pokémon. Startled, the Raichu dropped it and watched it hit the ground with a loud crash.
“What is it?” Jack wondered.
“It” the Pokémon said “Is extremely annoyed and would blast the three of you to oblivion if it hadn’t been instructed not to.”
“Oh come on Uxie, we all know your head looks like a bunch of bananas.” A second strange Pokémon commented as it floated out of some bushes.
“It could’ve been worse” said a third “They could’ve tried to eat you. That would’ve been funny.”
“Who are you?” Thunder asked. At this, the three Pokémon sighed.
“I am Uxie” Said the one with a yellow head “The blue headed Pokémon is Azelf, and the magenta one is Mesprit.”
“Why does Uxie always have its eyes closed?” Spark asked Thunder in a rather loud whisper.
Overhearing, Uxie responded “If anyone looks into my eyes, they will forget everything.” But seeing the Raichu’s incredulous look, he decided to demonstrate. Picking up a nearby Pidgey with Psychic, he pointed his head at it and opened his eyes. Immediately, the Pidgey stopped breathing and quickly died. “It forgot how to breathe.” Uxie explained “So that’s what would have happened to you if Mew hadn’t told me not to.”
“Mew?” Jack asked “Isn’t that the same Pokémon that sent those losers Entei, Raikou and Suicune?”
“The same.” Azelf answered. “Mew was disgusted with their performance and sent us to bring you to her.”
“What does Mew want with us?” Thunder asked.
But before any of the three fairies could respond, a Snorlax came crashing into the center of the Pokémon. Hungry after being woken up by a loud crash, Snorlax was delighted to see a cluster of bananas hovering in front of him. Quickly placing them in his mouth, he began to chew. Not satisfied, he looked around and saw a giant blueberry shooting an Ice Beam at him. Reaching through the Ice Beam, he grabbed it and placed it between his molars and started to crunch down on it. Still not content, the gluttonous Pokémon reached for the third thing floating in front of his face and, not caring whether or not it was food, chewed it up and swallowed it. Finally satisfied, Snorlax contentedly walked away, leaving Thunder, Spark and Jack to stare in horror at what they just witnessed.
Hehehe. I'm mean. Next chapter will be longer and take longer. R&R please.
Chapter 9
Dusk was falling and the Pidgeys had stopped singing and gone back to their nests when Thunder finally stopped so Spark and Jack could catch up.
“Well” he asked as they collapsed, gasping for breath, “You think this is a good spot to stop for the night?”
“I think any spot is good as long as we can rest” Spark and Jack said simultaneously.
“Well then, Jack, you get fire wood, Spark, you find food and I’ll find water.”
“Do I have to get fire wood?” Jack questioned “I’m so hot right now.” But as he got his breath back and started looking around, he noticed that the leaves had changed from green to crimson and gold with Pachirisu scurrying about, storing food for winter. And when he saw the murderous look on the gold Pikachu’s face, he slowly got up and started to plod off in search of dead wood.
Spark, in search of food, saw a tree. What was strange about this tree was the fact that it had what looked like bananas growing out of it. Quickly, he called Thunder and Jack so they could see them and eat them for dinner. By the time that they got there, Spark had already climbed up the tree and was slowly walking towards the bananas. Reaching them, he started to pull, but instead of bananas, he found himself holding a weird, sleeping Pokémon. Startled, the Raichu dropped it and watched it hit the ground with a loud crash.
“What is it?” Jack wondered.
“It” the Pokémon said “Is extremely annoyed and would blast the three of you to oblivion if it hadn’t been instructed not to.”
“Oh come on Uxie, we all know your head looks like a bunch of bananas.” A second strange Pokémon commented as it floated out of some bushes.
“It could’ve been worse” said a third “They could’ve tried to eat you. That would’ve been funny.”
“Who are you?” Thunder asked. At this, the three Pokémon sighed.
“I am Uxie” Said the one with a yellow head “The blue headed Pokémon is Azelf, and the magenta one is Mesprit.”
“Why does Uxie always have its eyes closed?” Spark asked Thunder in a rather loud whisper.
Overhearing, Uxie responded “If anyone looks into my eyes, they will forget everything.” But seeing the Raichu’s incredulous look, he decided to demonstrate. Picking up a nearby Pidgey with Psychic, he pointed his head at it and opened his eyes. Immediately, the Pidgey stopped breathing and quickly died. “It forgot how to breathe.” Uxie explained “So that’s what would have happened to you if Mew hadn’t told me not to.”
“Mew?” Jack asked “Isn’t that the same Pokémon that sent those losers Entei, Raikou and Suicune?”
“The same.” Azelf answered. “Mew was disgusted with their performance and sent us to bring you to her.”
“What does Mew want with us?” Thunder asked.
But before any of the three fairies could respond, a Snorlax came crashing into the center of the Pokémon. Hungry after being woken up by a loud crash, Snorlax was delighted to see a cluster of bananas hovering in front of him. Quickly placing them in his mouth, he began to chew. Not satisfied, he looked around and saw a giant blueberry shooting an Ice Beam at him. Reaching through the Ice Beam, he grabbed it and placed it between his molars and started to crunch down on it. Still not content, the gluttonous Pokémon reached for the third thing floating in front of his face and, not caring whether or not it was food, chewed it up and swallowed it. Finally satisfied, Snorlax contentedly walked away, leaving Thunder, Spark and Jack to stare in horror at what they just witnessed.
Hehehe. I'm mean. Next chapter will be longer and take longer. R&R please.
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