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mysterioustrainer
09/05/2004, 10:12 PM
Pokémon\\Beginning is the first part to a major epic I have been writing called Pokémon\\Story which is said like “Pokémon backslash story”. If you like what you read please comment in this topic.



Here is the link to [url=http://www.pokegym.net/showthread.php?t=10999]Pokémon\\Beginning[url].
mysterioustrainer
09/06/2004, 07:41 PM
Well chapter two is well underway but I took a bit of a break, so that I could add in something special into the previous chapter. I want to help illustrate the world I am trying to create so expect to see an new sketch of mine for each chapter. This time you can see my drawing of Hope herself.

http://www.freewebs.com/mysterioustrainer/images/hope1small.jpg

Also here is Hope's profile I have created, a basis as I develop the character:

Name: Hope Nitaki
Sex: Female
Height: 5'7"
Weight: 140 lbs.
Age: 16 (estimated)
Birth Date: unknown
Personality: Naive, Cheerful
History: Hope was born in the nation of Koritain during a three-month blizzard that took place in the mountains of Layania. Because knowing date and time was impossible to learn during the storms, her precise birthdate remains a mystery. However it is rumored that when she was born the storms stopped that night and the snow started to melt. However it was still some time before the familys of the village could leave their confined homes. She was named Hope because of this miracle.

Hope was the daugter of a master glass smith. His specialty was in stained glass works of art. The Nitaki family's home is beautifully decorated with colored windows of his best work. Hope was apprenticing under her father for some time. However, Hope's father was called to war during a brief conflict with the evil empire of Aragtok. A fierce battle claimed the life of Hope's father, but the battle was won and Koritain remained safe.

After her father's death, Hope took up to most of his responciblities in life including her contination to make glass works of art. Her family, despite their loss, still holds together through the times. Hope's mother is still alive to this time and she has a younger brother named Darek, age 10. Hope also loves to play with her two Pokemon, Plusle and Minun. She also takes care of the family Miltank.
Ancient Pokemon Trainer
09/06/2004, 09:48 PM
Nice.Umm...The word Kristy was involved or it might just be me...Kristy is another name for Hope or something?Or are you trying to connect last storie?Anyways good work.
mysterioustrainer
09/06/2004, 10:48 PM
I was afraid I inserted Kristy instead of Hope accidentaly. I changed it where appropriate. When starting a new story I have a problem of sticking with one name. Part Two should be up tonight.
Ancient Pokemon Trainer
09/07/2004, 08:27 PM
Yah good ol my mom is going to kill me.LOL.Pretty good.YAYNESS!The gods Ken Sugimori and Satoshi Tagiri!YAY!And the narrator...LOL.
mysterioustrainer
09/07/2004, 10:30 PM
*smacks his head in disbelief of Anceint Pokemon Trainer's comment* uh I was actually refering these gods to be pokemon in a unique way themselves. Pokemon we haven't discovered yet. But hey that was funny.

Anyways I don't have a sketch of the temple Hope had to travel through ready yet. It is going to be good though. But I do have chapter three ready. Anyways I would love more comment from other viewers on this new work because it seems people are reading it.

What is kinda funny lately is that my grandma found my first sketch and was so proud of it she put it up on the refridgerator door.
Ancient Pokemon Trainer
09/08/2004, 08:51 AM
Good.Included lots of action!In the 2nd chapter didn't it say something like she had to leave?Okay I won't try to post a lot sorry...
Metal Master
09/08/2004, 03:04 PM
I give it 5 Stars(Out of 4). That is a great story. Keep 'em coming.
mysterioustrainer
09/09/2004, 09:39 PM
Good.Included lots of action!In the 2nd chapter didn't it say something like she had to leave?Okay I won't try to post a lot sorry...
She does have to leave however it turns out the first place she saves is her hometown. Things will start to get underway in the next chapter. It is not done yet, mainly because I have been slightly occupied with the two new Pokemon games for GBA. However I promise I won't stop writing on this.
Ancient Pokemon Trainer
09/10/2004, 10:45 PM
Oh it's okay I am to wich reminds me I need to get ready for Leauge.
Ancient Pokemon Trainer
09/14/2004, 08:17 PM
God you made me teary...Nice storie and you have good backgrounds with Plusle and Minun I like them.
Metal Master
09/15/2004, 01:45 PM
I don't see why Plusle and Minun could go with them. I mean Ash (if you watched the tv series) had a Larvitar that wasn't part of his team. Oh well. They are cool.
mysterioustrainer
09/29/2004, 08:32 PM
Chapter Five is now up and as you can see I have split the thread to make this the comments thread.
Metal Master
09/30/2004, 04:42 PM
Ummm...... Where is the story?
Metal Master
09/30/2004, 04:51 PM
Never mind, I found it.
Ancient Pokemon Trainer
10/01/2004, 05:02 PM
It just linked to this Google thing I'm confused???
Ancient Pokemon Trainer
10/01/2004, 05:15 PM
Oh i found it nevermind.But nice and who a legendary as the first pokemon she catches?!Way to uber way way to uber.Nice chapter this is turning out to be very exciting.
mysterioustrainer
10/04/2004, 10:40 PM
Well thanks for all of your comments on this story. Yes I promise to keep it up even though I am writing my new story, "Fallen". Chapter Six is in the works and should be up soon.