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greyfox
01/21/2005, 04:15 PM
Chapter 1 - Prophicy

It is 2015 AD. 3 archeologists are digging in the blazing sun in the desert of the Orre Region. 2 of them are conversating about the readings from the sonic waves that were spread across the desert from their ultrasound machines. The other archeologist is still digging for any clues to what was found in the readings from the machine. From what the machine says, a 2 mile chamber, quite possibly a small city, has been detected under the sands. While digging , the arch. named Ben has found some kind of wall in the shell of the mountain side.
"Hey guys, you might want to come see this.". Chris and Brian run over to Ben to examin what he has found. On the wall, some sort of hiroglyphic reading is inscribed to the wall. Chris recognizes the ancient writings as a form of language from 2012 B.C.
"He who has read this has started the beginning of the end."."What does that mean?!"
The ground beneath the dehydrated archeologists starts to collapse beneath them. The men fall into an ocean like area beneath the sands. Water gets into Brians mouth, and he accidentally swallows it.
"Gu..Gu..Guys, its fresh water, no salt.".
"Thank goodness for that."said Ben as he drinks from the saltless sea.
After being refreshed from the cold water, the men head tword the shore to get dry, and to explore what they have come upon. The men agree that the first place they should explore is the tallest tower in the city. The men finally arrive after 13 minutes of walking, and walk into the deserted building, as they walk in, it is so dark, they can hardly see anything.
Brian thinks of something, so he throws a :pokeball: , "Go Amphoros!".
Amphoros and the archeologists continue up a flight of stairs. They find a room that looks like it has never been touched in 5000 years. Chris reads a tablet that he finds in the middle othe room on a pillar.
"You have arrived. The time to repent is now, for the end is near. you have begun the proccess that will react in a chain of events. Warn everyone, for it is all over.
"What have we done?!"
"Chris, calm down, its probably just some writings from an old geezer from the past. Don't worry about it.
The room starts to rumble, as everything around the men starts to age and crumble.
Okay, nows the time to leave. Brian releases his Aridactal from his :pokeball: .
" Lets get out of here aero!".
The men get on the back of the pokemon and they fly out of the city to the opening where they came from. Before they get there, the opening close. They are stranded as the city crumbles on top of them, and the sea rises, filling the city. The prophicy has begun. The men are buried alive, the end is near.

Please, comments wanted if you want me to continue with more chapters.

greyfox
01/22/2005, 10:47 AM
Chapter 2 - Dark Alliance

The rain is falling hard. the clouds are dark, and gloomy, and thunder and lightning provide most of the light in the sky. The earths guardian, Rayquaza, is flying over the atmosphere, but he feels that what is happening is not some normal storm, something starnge is happening. Meanwhile.....
"Sir, would you like to begin the tests?".
"Yes, lets use the small subjects before we use the big ones, we still dont know what will happen, keep in mind the mewtwo incident.".
"Yes sir."'
"Yes, our new alliance will sure give us a great deal of opportunity, wouldn't you agree.....Mayor?".
"Yes, a new age of power has begun, with the combined strength of you Geovanni and Team Rocket, and me and Team Snaggum, we will form......Team Overlord.".
"Yes, with your dark pokemon machine, and our power generators, a new army of undefeatable pokemon will emerge, and we will control humanity itself, WE WILL BE GODS!!!".
"No.........Overlords, hahahahahah!!!".
2 Rocket grunts release a Sneasal from its Team Rocket Ball.
"C'mon little fella, your going for a ride!".
"Sn......Nea......NEA....S....Sal?".
The Rocket grunts inject the sneasal with sleeping chemicals. When the Sneasal wakes up, he is in a capsule like chamber, and he is connected to genoraters of some kind. Geovanni and the evil Mayor watch as sneasal starts screaming in agony as the 2 genoraters charge it with purple and red electricity.
Geovanni smiles as he pets his pet Persian. The Mayor grins with an evil intent, and the glare from the electric shocks reflects off his face and teeth.
In front of the Team Overlord Island base, a scruffy looking grunt is guarding the front entrance.
As he looks tword the clouds, a beam of energy comes flying tword him, causing him to be repelled 5 feet. A Salamence comes swooping down tward the ground, carrying a hooded boy on his back. The boy grabs a card key from the knocked out grunts belt. The Salamence is returned to the boys Ultraball.
The boy opens the door, and says" Nice talk, lets do it again sometime."and as the Guard slowly loses consousness, he watches as the boy runs through the door, and leave.

greyfox
01/23/2005, 10:56 AM
Chapter 3 change of plans

The hooded boy is running down the hall, trying to get to the main tower, to release the wrongly captured pokemon. Before he gets to the elevator, he is stopped in his tracks by the alert alarm. Red flashing lights gleam the hall. Two rocket grunts are running after him now, coming out of the elevator. The elevator is now deactivated.
"Alright, you guys want to play, time to get whats comin to ya!".
The boy throws 2 :pokeball:'s and one releases a Metagross and the other is a Salamence.
"Your gonna pay for interfeering with the plans of Team Overlord!".
"Team Overlord?".
The Overlord grunt sends out a Dark Golem and the other sends out a Dark Muk.
"Psy Metal, Meteor Mash Golem!" and the hit was so hard, Golem gets ko'ed.
" Demon, Dragon Claw!" and the Muk suffers the same fate.
"Sorry guys, no time to play right now." and he hits there heads together.
" Alright Demon, looks like we're gonna be flying up the tower now." so the boy calls his Metagross back inside the :pokeball: and gets on the Salamences back. They fly out of the hall and head tward the top of the tower.
" Mayor, change of plans, we need to do a test on the big ones, now!".
" Yes, i agree, we have no choice, lets get started.".
" And, shall we start the "regeneration test?".
" No, not just yet, I have plans for this special one.".
As Giovanni says this, he looks tward an unconcious Deoxys.
" Before we escape, lets leave a present for this intruder of ours."
Giovanni points to a Dragonite thats connected to the generaters
"Alright Demon, lets go.".
before they get to the top, a ship flys out at 120 MPH. Then, the top of the tower explodes.
"What the hell?"
As the boy utters the words, his hood is repelled back from the blast.
The boy is the hero from the Fire Red/ Leaf Green Saga.
A cry from an angry Dragonite roars through the sky and the Dark Dragonite leaps into the air, shooting Hyper Beam after Hyper Beam.
"Looks like we gotta catch the dragonite.". "Well, lets GO!".

Burninating_Torchic
01/23/2005, 11:40 AM
horrible. Just no. Here's my comments.
1.chapters aren't long enough, I just read all 3 in less then 5 minutes.
2.HORRIBLE grammar and spelling. This is worse then all the n00bs in the CaC section combined. Heck, you even spelled Prophecy wrong -_-
3.when someone says something in your story, you don't always say who is saying it, which can lead to major confusion.
4.seems like a rip off combination of Yugioh, Destiny Deoxys, and Pokemon Colleseum so far.

greyfox
01/23/2005, 12:49 PM
okay dude, u need to stop there. Yeah, there might be some problems with my story, like grammar and stuff, but you don't go being harsh like that, this is my own story, i don't need you to critisize like that, just say you didn't enjoy it, dont say its just crap. this is my own story.

Burninating_Torchic
01/23/2005, 01:03 PM
okay dude, u need to stop there. Yeah, there might be some problems with my story, like grammar and stuff, but you don't go being harsh like that, this is my own story, i don't need you to critisize like that, just say you didn't enjoy it, dont say its just crap. this is my own story.

what the hell? You asked for comments, and now when I give you comments youre like "NO! YOURE WRONG! SHUT UP! GO AWAY!", etc, etc. I swear, this isn't the first time somebody's been an idiot like that, either...
Seriously, you cannot expect all comments to be good.

greyfox
01/23/2005, 05:51 PM
no, i think u have some issues, i don't care if somebody thinks it is pure bull or whatever, u don't go out and say it like that, u say something like i didn't enjoy it, or it sounds like all the other stories, u don't go cursin and stuff, your pathetic, get a life. :thumb:

PokePop
01/23/2005, 07:41 PM
Calm down.
You don't like the feedback, ignore it.
No point arguing with him about his opinion.

greyfox
01/23/2005, 08:19 PM
i apologize for being a little uproary, its just i thought that the review was kinda mean in a way, not that i don't want the criticism, i need that, its that it sounded to me like , well, u said it was garbage, and that just kinda ticked me off a bit, im sorry.

Burninating_Torchic
01/24/2005, 12:35 PM
well, u said it was garbage
Where? Please, I'd love for you to show me saying exactly that, I never did.

greyfox
01/24/2005, 01:13 PM
end of discussion, somebody lock this thread