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01/24/2005, 04:15 AM
how did ya like my first story? i know the chapters were short but other than that.
01/24/2005, 12:32 PM
don't like it. The storyline is too naive and fast paced. It's like you're doing a twist on the Ruby/Sapphire storyline, except it takes like 2 mins to go from start to mid way point.
04/25/2005, 11:56 AM
I thought it was good, but you need to extend your vocabulary and not use the same words over and over
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