"A Pokemon Story" comment thread

[Mew Master]

Post connent's about my fan fic "A Pokemon Story" here. For those who need a link here's a link to A Pokemon Story (http://pokegym.net/showthread.php?t=10925)

[Metal Master]

Finally a story that sounds realistic(in Pokemon terms.)

[Mew Master]

I've been writing the story down at my home and bringing it to the library to copy down but I just got out of my first day in High School so I wasn't able to bring it this time. I'll be on this Saterday to add more and if posible I'll try for Friday. FYI I'm on the third chapter on writing it down and I've only copyed about 1/3 of the first chapter down.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Yay go CHARMANDER!

[Mew Master]

I had trouble with my bike todays so didn't get to update much of the story, I have the update in red.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Hmm I have a feeling this is getting somewhere.Great work!

[Mew Master]

I forgot my story today so I can't update cause I might get something wrong. I promis to have something in about two weeks cause I'm going to be busy this weekend and I don't know if I'll be on but I'll try.

[Mew Master]

I'm now done with chapter one.

[Metal Master]

Jered sounds a lot like my name. Mine is Jared.

[Mew Master]

What a weird cowincadence.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

A magikarp if you beat Clarice...Well you could have at least put in there responce...

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Oh nice!Turned to attack her...Bad Gyrados BAD!Well a few spelling mistakes made it kind of hard to understandf but otherwise GREAT story.

[Mew Master]

Thanks, I should get started on writing it agen sence I'm getting caught up with the internet one, I'm only on the end of Chapter three and I havn't even started chapter 4 yet.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

ALRIGHT good on chapter 4!Here's a suggestion I got from Mysterious Pokemon Trainer:When someone is talking after they talk put a space so like this:
Mew Master said so and so


APT said so and so

Even if it is a pkemon do the same.Nice chapter!

[Mew Master]

I'll probably have to do chapter 4 in five different edits to get the whole thing. If anyone would like spoilers to my fan fic you can PM me and start begging, or ask nicly. Here's something that everyone will know: The story will have something to do with the movie Jirachi Wishmaker for a main part, even though the story takes place about 20 years after the movie happened.

EDIT: I added more to chapter 4, it's now to the part with the main charictors are teaming up with Professor Max Yura to help stop a evil plan of Team Ozone.

[Mew Master]

I added more to the story, now Max (from the show, but older) and Mew made a gust appearence, it should be a good read as the plot with Mew and Max will thicken in a little bit.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Okay good MewMaster.Nice of the use of Mew.A couple spelling errors here and theer but otherwise good.And Cerulian City was where Chris and Monica where supposed to fall in love or something.Anyways nice.

[Mew Master]

Chapter 5 will start to have a little romance in it, but it won't be anymore than handholding and kissing. Also there will be two more Legendary Pokemon showing up very soon, that all have something to do with a request Max has and Mew will forfill, it should make a great read. I'll also update more tonight.

[Mew Master]

I finished chapter 4. I should have part of chapter 5 up in a few days, chapter 5 is longer than chapter 4 so I'll be unable to do it all at once. I hope you like the story so far.

[Mew Master]

Chapter 5 is about half done now, hope you like it.

[gdog121]

I cant wait to read the rest
IM OUT!

[Mew Master]

I'm glad you like my story. Good coments help me write a good story.

[Mew Master]

I now have all of Chapter 5 up. I'm afraid it will be a while for my to put chapter 6 up because I havn't had much time to write it down on paper. I only have 3 pages wrote and chapter 6 was 10 pages long, but I don't plan for the chapter to be that long.

[Metal Master]

Nice job.

[Mew Master]

Most of Chapter 6 is now up. I'm trying to cut back on the lenght of the Chatpers so I can have a whole chapter up all at once sometimes.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Oh yeah nice and a little more about Monica and Chris.Pretty cool but why not a little more competition for Monica and Chris?Not just like Flamethrower and knock out.Maybe something like they get acptured and have to fight there way through 100 Ozone members!Or something like that.Also LOTS of spelling errors other then that awesome MewMAster!

[Mew Master]

I now have all of Chapter 6 up, I'll start working on Chapter 7 once I think of something for it to be about.

[Mew Master]

I fixed some errors I found in Chapter 6 and sence I had nothing to do all day I have Chapters 7 and 8 up.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

chap.8=nice! ;)

[Mew Master]

I started my own web site a few days ago and I've been using most of my free time making it nice so I havn't had time for my fan fic, but I did put my fan fic onto my site, I think it looks better there than here.

[Mew Master]

I'm in the middle of moving right now and stuff so it'll be a while befor I can get some more chapters up. I have chapter 12 writen, I just don't have the time to type them on the computer.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Oh that's okay you havn't been on much lately...

[Mew Master]

I was able to copy a few chapters I wrote out on the Notepad on my computer at home and save them to a floppy disk. I can only access the internet at the library so far, but this way when I visit I can copy and paste the new chapters.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Nice!!

[Mew Master]

I have 30 chapters writen down on a flopy disk, I might have the time to post all of them next time I'm at the library.

[Mew Master]

I added chapters 13-26, but I left at the part where the winner of the last battle is chosen to keep everyone is suspance, I'll finish all that I have to post after Christmas.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Wow who won?I am thinking from the other chapters that Monica won but I think Chris deserves to win.He has put alot of training into Charmander and started WAYWAYWAY long before Monica ever started training.And Charmander and Chris have a bond unlike Monica and her Charizard.Although I was dissapointed when Chris said his strongest pokemon was Dragonite.So it's true a Dragonite in general is much stronger then a Charizard I still think Charizard would be on a much higher level.I think these battles are getting a bit old though...Taking one or 2 hits and then knocked out.Also howbout some tricks ya know like Ash always does and creates a miracle and wins.Like once he used Bayleef's vines to jump it would be cool to see Chris or Monica and other people use new tricks.

[Mew Master]

Good idea, sense I like the normal battles best when I get in one I tend to forget about what others would like. During the battle with Demon (the leader in the Orange League) I'll try to remember to add a few tricks. I have a bad memory so it'll be hard to remember, well I think. I don't remember if I have a bad memory.

[Mew Master]

I put up the rest of Chapter 26. You can now know who won. Also I'm typing a copy of my favorite book: Freak the Mighty, so I won't have time for my fan fic for the rest of the month, sorry.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Well I just read chapters 27-30 and they were pretty good.Though I have to say the battles were boring.And the one trick with Flamethrower against Sandstorm is and old trick.Also chapter 0 I think the title was Team Ozone returns but I didn't read anything about Ozone.A few mistakes here and there but overall pretty good.Infact chapter 30 has inspired me to right my own fiction.An actual good one unlike my others.

[Mew Master]

In Chapter 30 it tells about the Team Ozone member stealing the bluprints for the one machine, which, later in the story, they modify and use to kill the mother Lugia. At my home I have chapter 42 writen, but I couldn't get onto a computer with use of a floppy disk at the library. Aslo, I'm going to be moving into my new house on February 1st and the internet should be hooked up by the 10th. Hopfully, if everything goes to plan, I can post new chapters as soon as I type them out.

Here's a little scopp for what to expect in future chapters:

Chris and Monica have a home of there own.

Here's something I plan to do, but it's too far into the story for me to have typed out yet:

Chris has a huge suprise planned for Monica during the Silver Confrence. This will effect the rest of the story and the lives of both the charictors.

[Mew Master]

I posted Chapter 31. Sorry I ain't been posting latley, I've been too busy.

[Mew Master]

I added a lot of chapters to my story. Chapter 35 is very sad, so if you're not very good with death I sugest you don't read it.

[Ancient Pokemon Trainer]

Looking forward to the big battle! Oh and btw I see you have a habbit os saying seen instead of saw. So yeah but otherwise it's realy good! Good tricks in the battles they are getting better and better! :wink: :thumb:

[Mew Master]

I'm glad you like it. About the seen instead of saw, I have a southern accent, and it tends to leak into my writing. Wich ain't too much of a problem.