Pokémon TCG: Sword and Shield—Brilliant Stars

flymere

me-is-human

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flymere evolves from flymer
FLYMERE60hp :fire:/:psychic:/flying
flymere loooks like charmeleon&staravea combine



2:fire:1:colorlessflaming peck 50
the defending pokemon is now buned & peralized
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3:fire:2:colorlessflaming fly 60
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:fire::psychic:burning sleep the defending pokemon is burned&asleep
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weakness: :water:,:lightning,psychic

copy wrighted
 
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perilized= paralyzed, spell it right

take out the 2 C in flaming fly, 2 C in flaming peck and make it 20 damage (the special condtiotns make up for it)
 
me-is-human: you don't have the right to 'ban' anyone from 'your' threads. if you post to the board, anyone who wishes to and who follows the board rules is allowed to post in reply.

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Okay, analyzing the card from the top:
1. Flymere needs to be capitalyzed.
2. 60HP is too low for a Stage 1 in this metagame.
3. Flying is technically not a type. Where does [P] come from?
4. Cards have never had an auto-paralyze effect without a cost. This causes your opponent to be constantly be unable to attack.
5. Flaming Fly takes way too much Energy.
6. Burning Sleep... doesn't seem to fit Staravia and Charmeleon. Besides, Stage 1s don't have three attacks.
7. Where does a [P] Weakness come in? How much damage is added with it?
8. What is the resistance/retreat cost?
9. Technically, you can't copyright this card, seeing as Pokemon belongs to Nintendo. Besides, you don't see anyone else copyrighting their cards.

Hope that helps. :thumb:
 
A pokemon that can make another pokemon automatic paralyized? Also, 3 fire and 2 colorless just for 60 damage is not very good so you should make it 1 fire and 2 colorless. Wheres the resistance or th retreat cost?
 
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flymere evolves from flymer
FLYMERE lvl.34 :fire:/flying hp 80
flymere loooks like charmeleon&staravea combined



2:fire:flaming peck 30
the defending pokemon is now buned
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:colorless:colorlessareal ace 20
flip a coin, if heads, this attack does 10 damage to one of your opponents benched pokemon, if tails, switch Flymere with one of your benched pokemon if any
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weakness: :water:,:lightning+20
resistance::fighting:-20
retreat cost::colorless:colorless
my friend helped edit this
 
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All you did is make the same card again, if you are goign to edit it then do it on the first post. Do not spam post the same card.

You did not even listen to the suggestions to the first one, did you?


I will got step by step and my responses and comments are in bold.



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Before I start, STOP with the size changes, it hurts to read, and looks VERY, VERY sloppy

flymere evolves from flymer
FLYMERE60hp :fire:/:psychic:/flying
60 HP? That is extremely bad for a stage 1. It should be 70 or 80.

There is no such thing as a flygin type. There is colorless, [C], but not flying. Also You cannot have 3 types. At the most a Pokemon can be 2 types.
flymere loooks like charmeleon&staravea combine

You spelled combined wrong, and give a very undetailed picture. Either give a detailed enough picture so a reader can imagine it or do not post a picture.



2:fire:1:colorlessflaming peck 50
the defending pokemon is now buned & peralized

You mispelled Burned and Paralyzed. You have 3 energy for 50 and atomatic Paralyzation AND Burn. Not only is it beyond broken, but once you get it out, you opponent pretty much loses unless they can switch or evolve.
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3:fire:2:colorlessflaming fly 60

For this attack I can attach 3 more energy and do 10 more damage? NAH, I'll stick to 50 and auto Paralysis.
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:fire::psychic:burning sleep the defending pokemon is burned&asleep

ooh more attacks. This one takes just 2 energy and auto butn and sleep. Once again this is beyond broken, and where do you get a [P] energy for on this Pokemon. Also when making a pokemon card the attacks are listed down in order by energy cost. This one would be on top.
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weakness: :water:,:lightning,psychic Why is is weak to [P]?
resistance:grass
retreat cost:3cololess I have never heard of cololess energy. Also bird pokemon are known for lower retreat cost. THis should be 2 at most.
copy wrighted
If you going to pretend to copyright these cards (which you can't) at least spell the word right.



A MUCH better version of the card would be:

Flymere
[C]+[R](fire)
HP 80

Evolves from Flymer

[R][C] Burning Aura 20
If Flymere is damaged during your opponent's next turn, the defending Pokemon is now burned.

[R][R][C] Flame Dash 50

Wekaness [W] +20
Ressistance [F] -20
Retreat: [C]
 
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