Discussion in 'Create-A-Card' started by me-is-human, Mar 31, 2008.

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  1. me-is-human

    me-is-human New Member

    flymere evolves from flymer
    FLYMERE60hp :fire:/:psychic:/flying
    flymere loooks like charmeleon&staravea combine

    2:fire:1:colorlessflaming peck 50
    the defending pokemon is now buned & peralized
    __________________________________________________ ___________
    3:fire:2:colorlessflaming fly 60
    :fire::psychic:burning sleep the defending pokemon is burned&asleep
    __________________________________________________ ___________
    weakness: :water:,:lightning,psychic

    copy wrighted
    Last edited: Apr 4, 2008
  2. Lakak

    Lakak New Member

    perilized= paralyzed, spell it right

    take out the 2 C in flaming fly, 2 C in flaming peck and make it 20 damage (the special condtiotns make up for it)
  3. SD PokeMom

    SD PokeMom Mod Supervisor Staff Member

    me-is-human: you don't have the right to 'ban' anyone from 'your' threads. if you post to the board, anyone who wishes to and who follows the board rules is allowed to post in reply.

    if all you want are posts about how awesome your cards are, if you can't take constructive criticism of your card's wording/grammar/structure, perhaps you should re-think posting them here.

    i am editing the 'ban' out of your OP. do NOT edit it back in; if you do so i will lock or delete your thread. if you have a problem with something another member has posted, REPORT the post via the report (triangle w/exclamation point) button under their name.

    as i said before in your other threads: constructive criticism ONLY. continued bashing of members will result in infraction points and/or temporary bans for ALL parties involved.

    Last edited: Mar 31, 2008
  4. charmander rox

    charmander rox New Member

    Okay, analyzing the card from the top:
    1. Flymere needs to be capitalyzed.
    2. 60HP is too low for a Stage 1 in this metagame.
    3. Flying is technically not a type. Where does [P] come from?
    4. Cards have never had an auto-paralyze effect without a cost. This causes your opponent to be constantly be unable to attack.
    5. Flaming Fly takes way too much Energy.
    6. Burning Sleep... doesn't seem to fit Staravia and Charmeleon. Besides, Stage 1s don't have three attacks.
    7. Where does a [P] Weakness come in? How much damage is added with it?
    8. What is the resistance/retreat cost?
    9. Technically, you can't copyright this card, seeing as Pokemon belongs to Nintendo. Besides, you don't see anyone else copyrighting their cards.

    Hope that helps. :thumb:
  5. poketo

    poketo New Member

    Did you notice it's almost the same card?
  6. charchar

    charchar New Member

    A pokemon that can make another pokemon automatic paralyized? Also, 3 fire and 2 colorless just for 60 damage is not very good so you should make it 1 fire and 2 colorless. Wheres the resistance or th retreat cost?
  7. me-is-human

    me-is-human New Member

    edited verson1.0

    flymere evolves from flymer
    FLYMERE lvl.34 :fire:/flying hp 80
    flymere loooks like charmeleon&staravea combined

    2:fire:flaming peck 30
    the defending pokemon is now buned
    __________________________________________________ ___________

    :colorless:colorlessareal ace 20
    flip a coin, if heads, this attack does 10 damage to one of your opponents benched pokemon, if tails, switch Flymere with one of your benched pokemon if any
    __________________________________________________ ___________
    weakness: :water:,:lightning+20
    retreat cost::colorless:colorless
    my friend helped edit this
    Last edited: Apr 4, 2008
  8. Absoltrainer

    Absoltrainer Active Member

    All you did is make the same card again, if you are goign to edit it then do it on the first post. Do not spam post the same card.

    You did not even listen to the suggestions to the first one, did you?

    I will got step by step and my responses and comments are in bold.

    A MUCH better version of the card would be:

    HP 80

    Evolves from Flymer

    [R][C] Burning Aura 20
    If Flymere is damaged during your opponent's next turn, the defending Pokemon is now burned.

    [R][R][C] Flame Dash 50

    Wekaness [W] +20
    Ressistance [F] -20
    Retreat: [C]

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