Pokemon Naranja: Through the Eyes of a Run Away: Winner Announced!!
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Okay. By the way, chapter 14 is up! Enjoy! David out.
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Chapter 2
Betrayal
Quartzine Town Outskirts
Obsidian was walking towards Quartzine town. He heard that there was strong rock and steel type Pokémon there. ‘Now I have to catch some stronger Pokémon and then work on training all of them. Then I will work on attempting to make allies. Worst comes to worst I will take out Smog myself.
A rustling came from a bush near Obsidian.
‘Crap, they already round me!’ he thought, his body frozen in terror. He turns around, and looks into the bush, just to find the same Munchlax he found in Weatherstone, which was now dragging around a tattered umbrella. ‘Weird…’ “Munchlax, can you…um…go back to your family please.
“…Lax?” the Munchlax answered with a confused look on its face.
“Go, now, that way,” Obsidian told the Pokémon as he turned it towards the other direction and pushed it that way. Obsidian started to walk away.
Munchlax waited until he was out of Obsidian’s sight of view, just to follow continue following him.
Quartzine Town
Obsidian looked around the town. He was here a couple times before, during his days in Smog, but this time it looks different. The last time he was there people were running around, working, having fun, and living there lives. He walked into a town with all of the doors and windows shut and locked. No one was outside, but you knew people lived there; the signs of live were all around him. ‘Wonder why everyone is?’
Quartzine Forest
Obsidian poked his head into the forest. There were many Pokemon being harvested by Smog. ‘Figures. I don’t want to cause any trouble.’ He looked to his side and saw a Pokemon watching him. ‘Eevee…I’d like to catch one, but in this condition, I’d rather not...’ Obsidian walked out of the mine, with the Eevee following him.
The Greasy Spool (Bar located in Quartzine town)
Obsidian walked to the door in the bar. He saw people in there, but the doors were locked. ‘I wonder what’s up’ Obsidian then looked to the left of him and saw wanted posters but up by Smog. On the top of the black list, Obsidian saw his name and picture with a reward of P50,000,000 on his head. ‘I’ve got a bad feeling about this…’ Obsidian then turned around, to find twenty grunts and an admin were right behind. “Son of a…”
The admin had long blonde hair that went past his shoulders. Like all the other admins, his face was like stone, and showed no emotion. He seemed unfazed and seemed to have not a single pokeball on his belt. Unlike the other admins though, he wore a grunt outfit.
‘All the admins look the same…’
“Kill the traitor!!” one of the grunts screamed out. There pokemon made many different attacks.
Obsidian jump up and flipped onto the roof of the building. ‘How did I know I was here?’ He sent out Sel, Glade, Scar, and Bre. “Lets get out there and fight guys. Scar, I want you to use a draco meteor into the middle of the crowd to make room for Bre. Sel and Glade, assume your normal positions.
All the pokemon nodded, and proceeded there orders.
Sel crawled up the back of the black shirt of her master. She then put her arms in the slits that where made for him, and opened up the eye and nose slits.
Glade went to Obsidians left side.
“Ready,” Obsidian said to scar.
Scar pulled his head back, and fired the attack at the center of the pack.
Bre jumped into the gap that Scar made and started attacking the grunts and there pokemon.
Glade’s eyes glowed for a second, and sent the levels and strengths of the opposing pokemon telepathically to his owner.
“So we don’t need to jump in, Bre should be strong enough to take out these pokemon herself…this is a complete joke.”
The admin of the grunts pulled out a silver whistle. “Time to turn the tides of this battle,” he said under his breath. The admin blew the whistle and the unspeakable happened.
Bre stopped his attack on the grunts, just to jump up to the roof Obsidian, waiting for another order.
The admin followed, and ordered Glade to make a barrier around the roof so there would be no interferences.
Glade did as asked, and then the four pokemon and two trainers were unable to escape.
Glade and Bre joined the admin’s side as he began to speak. “I’m Hyperion, the admin in charge of the Quartzine mine and forest. These are my two pokemon that you know too well, Bre and Glade. I am so grateful to be in your presence in battle, Smooth Demon.”
“I don’t give a crap on who you are, why did you just say that Bre and Glade were your pokemon?! Rue and Sakura were the original owners of them, and now I am there owner, not you!!” Obsidian screamed in rage. He seemed extremely angry, and enraged on the fact that two of his best friend’s pokemon have just betrayed him.
“Well, that’s a funny story, unlike you and Chaps, Rue and Sakura never caught a pokemon. Smog gave them each a pokemon from there own arsenal. So really, they are Smog’s pokemon, not yours, and you just have to live with that. Now, the only way to get out of here is to defeat Glade or make you own way through the barrier. You are also out numbered, two to one.”
“I see it as even, Sel, Scar, and myself versus you, Bre, and Glade.”
“Not really, you see, Scar isn’t fully loyal to you, and is also very tired after using draco meteor. I don’t think he is so used to this strain in power, now let’s begin. Bre, thunder punch.”
‘I’ll dodge to the left, then let Sel slide out of my shirt and then have her use an ice punch on Bre which should knock her out, and then use a night slash on Glade and then get the hell out of here.’ Obsidian jump to the left, just to get hit by the punch. He then got hit in the back where Sel was. ‘How did they know the plan?’
“Glade tells me everything you are thinking because it seems that you are still emotionally attached to him. If you completely shut Glade and Bre from your heart, then you will be able to defeat me, but I don’t think that it is even possible to turn your back on the pokemon that were once the partners of your best friends.”
“Hyperion, you’re a sick man.”
“People have told me that, and I agree with them. Bre, kill the traitor.”
‘Ok, try to loose emotions…’ Obsidian thought. He then got hit with a seed bomb and a sky uppercut. Obsidian then tore off his shirt and said, “Sel, Run!”
Sel looked at her owner with a confused look.
“I told you to get out of here.”
“…Snea…” the pokemon said, pointing to the barrier.
“…Oh ya…that…crap…” Obsidian said to himself.
‘How will I be able to…that’s it!!’ Obsidian thought. “Scar, use hydro pump to flood the place!’
“We’ll all drown if we do that!”
“Seems like I was able to cut the link, so now die with me Hyperion.”
Scar started the hydro pump, waiting for the order to stop. Though it wasn’t going to come.
About an hour later
“The water is up to your waist, what are you going to do Hyperion?”
“The same thing you are doing, waiting for the other to make an opening.”
“Not going to happen and now that I’ve sealed my heart, you don’t have any idea on what I am thinking.”
“Wait”
Three more hours
The two trainers and four pokemon were now treading water; there was almost no more room for air.
“Your insane boy!”
“People tell me that a lot and I agree, keep it coming Scar.”
‘This boy is smarter than he looks; I don’t see why boss solely trained him for battle and assassination. I will have to cut the force field sometime or another, maybe I can hold my breath longer than him and have him die right before the force field is lifted, ya, that’s exactly what I am going to do.’
‘Looks like I know something that he doesn’t know. Glade’s terrified of drowning, that’s why he is on top of Hyperion’s head. When I push him in, the field will go out and I can escape.’ Obsidian sunk into the water, and swam under Hyperion. He then took a chain out of his bag and loosely tied it around Hyperion’s foot.
“Choosing your grave boy, there will only be three more minutes of air and then we will die together.”
Obsidian dove under the water again and then pulled the chain down with him, making Hyperion and Glade go under the water. The second Glade’s head was under the water, his eyes lit and the force field bursted right open. As the water was emptying out, Obsidian got a stake and shoved it between one of the chains to make sure the Smog admin wouldn’t be able to follow him. He picked up Sel and Scar and they started to run off to another town, and another adventure.
Next chapter: Will Obsidian find someone who hates smog as much as himself, will new friends be made, and will he get a new pokemon (or two)? read chapter three for the answers.
Betrayal
Quartzine Town Outskirts
Obsidian was walking towards Quartzine town. He heard that there was strong rock and steel type Pokémon there. ‘Now I have to catch some stronger Pokémon and then work on training all of them. Then I will work on attempting to make allies. Worst comes to worst I will take out Smog myself.
A rustling came from a bush near Obsidian.
‘Crap, they already round me!’ he thought, his body frozen in terror. He turns around, and looks into the bush, just to find the same Munchlax he found in Weatherstone, which was now dragging around a tattered umbrella. ‘Weird…’ “Munchlax, can you…um…go back to your family please.
“…Lax?” the Munchlax answered with a confused look on its face.
“Go, now, that way,” Obsidian told the Pokémon as he turned it towards the other direction and pushed it that way. Obsidian started to walk away.
Munchlax waited until he was out of Obsidian’s sight of view, just to follow continue following him.
Quartzine Town
Obsidian looked around the town. He was here a couple times before, during his days in Smog, but this time it looks different. The last time he was there people were running around, working, having fun, and living there lives. He walked into a town with all of the doors and windows shut and locked. No one was outside, but you knew people lived there; the signs of live were all around him. ‘Wonder why everyone is?’
Quartzine Forest
Obsidian poked his head into the forest. There were many Pokemon being harvested by Smog. ‘Figures. I don’t want to cause any trouble.’ He looked to his side and saw a Pokemon watching him. ‘Eevee…I’d like to catch one, but in this condition, I’d rather not...’ Obsidian walked out of the mine, with the Eevee following him.
The Greasy Spool (Bar located in Quartzine town)
Obsidian walked to the door in the bar. He saw people in there, but the doors were locked. ‘I wonder what’s up’ Obsidian then looked to the left of him and saw wanted posters but up by Smog. On the top of the black list, Obsidian saw his name and picture with a reward of P50,000,000 on his head. ‘I’ve got a bad feeling about this…’ Obsidian then turned around, to find twenty grunts and an admin were right behind. “Son of a…”
The admin had long blonde hair that went past his shoulders. Like all the other admins, his face was like stone, and showed no emotion. He seemed unfazed and seemed to have not a single pokeball on his belt. Unlike the other admins though, he wore a grunt outfit.
‘All the admins look the same…’
“Kill the traitor!!” one of the grunts screamed out. There pokemon made many different attacks.
Obsidian jump up and flipped onto the roof of the building. ‘How did I know I was here?’ He sent out Sel, Glade, Scar, and Bre. “Lets get out there and fight guys. Scar, I want you to use a draco meteor into the middle of the crowd to make room for Bre. Sel and Glade, assume your normal positions.
All the pokemon nodded, and proceeded there orders.
Sel crawled up the back of the black shirt of her master. She then put her arms in the slits that where made for him, and opened up the eye and nose slits.
Glade went to Obsidians left side.
“Ready,” Obsidian said to scar.
Scar pulled his head back, and fired the attack at the center of the pack.
Bre jumped into the gap that Scar made and started attacking the grunts and there pokemon.
Glade’s eyes glowed for a second, and sent the levels and strengths of the opposing pokemon telepathically to his owner.
“So we don’t need to jump in, Bre should be strong enough to take out these pokemon herself…this is a complete joke.”
The admin of the grunts pulled out a silver whistle. “Time to turn the tides of this battle,” he said under his breath. The admin blew the whistle and the unspeakable happened.
Bre stopped his attack on the grunts, just to jump up to the roof Obsidian, waiting for another order.
The admin followed, and ordered Glade to make a barrier around the roof so there would be no interferences.
Glade did as asked, and then the four pokemon and two trainers were unable to escape.
Glade and Bre joined the admin’s side as he began to speak. “I’m Hyperion, the admin in charge of the Quartzine mine and forest. These are my two pokemon that you know too well, Bre and Glade. I am so grateful to be in your presence in battle, Smooth Demon.”
“I don’t give a crap on who you are, why did you just say that Bre and Glade were your pokemon?! Rue and Sakura were the original owners of them, and now I am there owner, not you!!” Obsidian screamed in rage. He seemed extremely angry, and enraged on the fact that two of his best friend’s pokemon have just betrayed him.
“Well, that’s a funny story, unlike you and Chaps, Rue and Sakura never caught a pokemon. Smog gave them each a pokemon from there own arsenal. So really, they are Smog’s pokemon, not yours, and you just have to live with that. Now, the only way to get out of here is to defeat Glade or make you own way through the barrier. You are also out numbered, two to one.”
“I see it as even, Sel, Scar, and myself versus you, Bre, and Glade.”
“Not really, you see, Scar isn’t fully loyal to you, and is also very tired after using draco meteor. I don’t think he is so used to this strain in power, now let’s begin. Bre, thunder punch.”
‘I’ll dodge to the left, then let Sel slide out of my shirt and then have her use an ice punch on Bre which should knock her out, and then use a night slash on Glade and then get the hell out of here.’ Obsidian jump to the left, just to get hit by the punch. He then got hit in the back where Sel was. ‘How did they know the plan?’
“Glade tells me everything you are thinking because it seems that you are still emotionally attached to him. If you completely shut Glade and Bre from your heart, then you will be able to defeat me, but I don’t think that it is even possible to turn your back on the pokemon that were once the partners of your best friends.”
“Hyperion, you’re a sick man.”
“People have told me that, and I agree with them. Bre, kill the traitor.”
‘Ok, try to loose emotions…’ Obsidian thought. He then got hit with a seed bomb and a sky uppercut. Obsidian then tore off his shirt and said, “Sel, Run!”
Sel looked at her owner with a confused look.
“I told you to get out of here.”
“…Snea…” the pokemon said, pointing to the barrier.
“…Oh ya…that…crap…” Obsidian said to himself.
‘How will I be able to…that’s it!!’ Obsidian thought. “Scar, use hydro pump to flood the place!’
“We’ll all drown if we do that!”
“Seems like I was able to cut the link, so now die with me Hyperion.”
Scar started the hydro pump, waiting for the order to stop. Though it wasn’t going to come.
About an hour later
“The water is up to your waist, what are you going to do Hyperion?”
“The same thing you are doing, waiting for the other to make an opening.”
“Not going to happen and now that I’ve sealed my heart, you don’t have any idea on what I am thinking.”
“Wait”
Three more hours
The two trainers and four pokemon were now treading water; there was almost no more room for air.
“Your insane boy!”
“People tell me that a lot and I agree, keep it coming Scar.”
‘This boy is smarter than he looks; I don’t see why boss solely trained him for battle and assassination. I will have to cut the force field sometime or another, maybe I can hold my breath longer than him and have him die right before the force field is lifted, ya, that’s exactly what I am going to do.’
‘Looks like I know something that he doesn’t know. Glade’s terrified of drowning, that’s why he is on top of Hyperion’s head. When I push him in, the field will go out and I can escape.’ Obsidian sunk into the water, and swam under Hyperion. He then took a chain out of his bag and loosely tied it around Hyperion’s foot.
“Choosing your grave boy, there will only be three more minutes of air and then we will die together.”
Obsidian dove under the water again and then pulled the chain down with him, making Hyperion and Glade go under the water. The second Glade’s head was under the water, his eyes lit and the force field bursted right open. As the water was emptying out, Obsidian got a stake and shoved it between one of the chains to make sure the Smog admin wouldn’t be able to follow him. He picked up Sel and Scar and they started to run off to another town, and another adventure.
Next chapter: Will Obsidian find someone who hates smog as much as himself, will new friends be made, and will he get a new pokemon (or two)? read chapter three for the answers.
David's Confused Pokedad
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This is action-packed! Very good. I'll be looking forward to Chp. 3. David out.
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Chapter 3, Part One
The Cloaks
Mountport City:
Obsidian, Sel, and Scar made it out of Hyperion’s grip and got to Mountport by nightfall. “So guys, there were five, now there’s only three…we need some more team members…” The Pokemon were extremely tired, and didn’t answer besides a nod. “OK, I can see you guys are tired, return.” Obsidian returned his two Pokemon and then put the pokeballs in his pouch. A woman in a police uniform was walking towards Obsidian.
“Sir, public nudity is illegal in this city, please get a shirt on.”
‘Crap…I forgot my shirt at the battlefield, like hell I’m going back there. I’ll just go buy a new one.’ “Sorry miss…I’ll go find a shirt to where immediately.” Obsidian walked into a story, though they all seemed locked. ‘Wonder what’s up...it’s only seven, stores don’t close until around ten in this part of the city.’ Obsidian then noticed a wanted poster with his name on it. ‘This is bad…’ The teen started to run towards the town exit, only to be greeted by a group of Smog grunts. Now, usually he would have no problem with this. Though the battle with Hyperion tired his Pokemon out as well as himself, so fighting wasn’t an option. ‘What do I do know.’
“Wait till boss here’s that we have Obsidian right here all weak!” one of the grunts exclaimed. They all sent out there Pokemon. A Gengar, Nidorino, Tyrogue, Kadabra, Grimer, Arbok, and Koffing were all ready to attack the helpless Obsidian. Suddenly, a flash of blinding light engulfed the area and the sound of fighting came near the grunts. When the light disappeared and everything was visible, Obsidian saw a group of seven people and the group of grunts piled up, there Pokemon knocked out.
“We saw you needed help.” a man said as he turned to Obsidian. He was wearing a red cloak, with a red shirt under it. His jeans were torn and he had a nice chiseled chin. His brown hair was cut very short. Obsidian then noticed that the whole entire group was wearing cloaks. There were three girls, one with a purple cloak who looked like she was in her twenties. She was almost as tall as the red cloaked man and had long blond hair. Another who was wearing an off-green cloak and looked very elderly and experienced. Her face was wrinkled and wore the gray hair on her head in a bun. The last girl looked a bit older than Obsidian. She wore a silver cloak and was blushing a little and was staring at Obsidian. Her black hair was short and about shoulder length, her face showing peace. Along with the red cloaked man, there were three others. The man with a white cloak and bleach white hair who looked to be around the age of thirty. Another who was next to the elderly woman, and looked about as old, wearing a brown cloak. Finally, there was a teen boy who looked around Obsidian’s age wore a yellow cloak. He seemed to look at Obsidian with a spiteful look. “I’m Doxis Quin.” The red cloaked man said.
“Nicoli Banto at your service,” the white cloaked man said.
“August Day,” the purple cloaked woman introduced herself as.
“William and Josephine Amaretto,” the old man introduced himself and his wife as.
“Kertix McGinnis” said the yellow cloaked teen in a sickly tone to Obsidian, looking away right after.
“…Nino Amore…” the girl introduced herself as shyly, hiding her face immediately.
“I’m Obsidian, it’s nice to meet you all, thanks for before, I just got back from fighting them and my Pokemon are very tired at the time.”
“Well, you can stay with us for the night then Obsidian.” Doxis said. “C’mon, back to base everyone.”
Base
The base was sort of like a mansion on the edge of town. There were many rooms, including a huge kitchen, dining room, and even a battle arena. “So, how did you get into that mess Obsidian?” Nicoli asked.
“I was in a battle with them before, which tired me and my Pokemon out, maybe that’s why the leftover grunts were able to catch up with me.”
“I can see, so you’re against Smog it seems.”
“Yes, right now I am against them, why do you ask.”
“We need kids like you, fighters and rebels.”
“Who are you really?”
“We are a group made to stop Smog and destroy it. We are The Cloaks.”
“The Cloaks eh, I’ve heard of them before, each member specializing in a certain type of Pokemon that corresponds with there cloak color. I’m guessing that you are an expert with normal-type Pokemon, right Nicoli.”
“The cloak tells all. Though most of us in this group are getting old, and we would like a young man like you to join, or at least help us in our next raid on the base about ten kilometers from here.”
“I’ll have to think about the invitation, but since I’m just wandering right now, I’ll help you guys with the raid.”
“That’s great Obsidian, go to Nino and she’ll show you to your room for the night…and why don’t you have a shirt on right now?”
“Long story, and thanks, I’ll go to her right now.” Obsidian walked aimlessly around the base until he found the silver cloaked girl. At the time, she wasn’t wearing her cloak, and had a simple silver shirt on with a black mini-skirt. “Um…Nino, Nicoli told me that you knew where I was staying, can you show it to me?”
“..Sure thing,” Nino said as she blushed a bit. She motioned Obsidian to follow as the two teens went to the other side of the base to Obsidian’s room. It was located by a window that looked over the bay. There was a bed, a trashcan, and a shelf to put stuff on in it, very simple.
“Thank you Nino-chan.”
“You’re welcome Obsidian-kun.” Nino then stumbled out of the room.
“Now to get some rest,” Obsidian said as he yawned and fell asleep.
Part Two will be coming shortly. Right now I have some free time and will be writing it as you read this chapter. Hopefully I may be done by the time you all read this. A final note is that the character bios for my characters will be located in the first post when I am finished with part two.
The Cloaks
Mountport City:
Obsidian, Sel, and Scar made it out of Hyperion’s grip and got to Mountport by nightfall. “So guys, there were five, now there’s only three…we need some more team members…” The Pokemon were extremely tired, and didn’t answer besides a nod. “OK, I can see you guys are tired, return.” Obsidian returned his two Pokemon and then put the pokeballs in his pouch. A woman in a police uniform was walking towards Obsidian.
“Sir, public nudity is illegal in this city, please get a shirt on.”
‘Crap…I forgot my shirt at the battlefield, like hell I’m going back there. I’ll just go buy a new one.’ “Sorry miss…I’ll go find a shirt to where immediately.” Obsidian walked into a story, though they all seemed locked. ‘Wonder what’s up...it’s only seven, stores don’t close until around ten in this part of the city.’ Obsidian then noticed a wanted poster with his name on it. ‘This is bad…’ The teen started to run towards the town exit, only to be greeted by a group of Smog grunts. Now, usually he would have no problem with this. Though the battle with Hyperion tired his Pokemon out as well as himself, so fighting wasn’t an option. ‘What do I do know.’
“Wait till boss here’s that we have Obsidian right here all weak!” one of the grunts exclaimed. They all sent out there Pokemon. A Gengar, Nidorino, Tyrogue, Kadabra, Grimer, Arbok, and Koffing were all ready to attack the helpless Obsidian. Suddenly, a flash of blinding light engulfed the area and the sound of fighting came near the grunts. When the light disappeared and everything was visible, Obsidian saw a group of seven people and the group of grunts piled up, there Pokemon knocked out.
“We saw you needed help.” a man said as he turned to Obsidian. He was wearing a red cloak, with a red shirt under it. His jeans were torn and he had a nice chiseled chin. His brown hair was cut very short. Obsidian then noticed that the whole entire group was wearing cloaks. There were three girls, one with a purple cloak who looked like she was in her twenties. She was almost as tall as the red cloaked man and had long blond hair. Another who was wearing an off-green cloak and looked very elderly and experienced. Her face was wrinkled and wore the gray hair on her head in a bun. The last girl looked a bit older than Obsidian. She wore a silver cloak and was blushing a little and was staring at Obsidian. Her black hair was short and about shoulder length, her face showing peace. Along with the red cloaked man, there were three others. The man with a white cloak and bleach white hair who looked to be around the age of thirty. Another who was next to the elderly woman, and looked about as old, wearing a brown cloak. Finally, there was a teen boy who looked around Obsidian’s age wore a yellow cloak. He seemed to look at Obsidian with a spiteful look. “I’m Doxis Quin.” The red cloaked man said.
“Nicoli Banto at your service,” the white cloaked man said.
“August Day,” the purple cloaked woman introduced herself as.
“William and Josephine Amaretto,” the old man introduced himself and his wife as.
“Kertix McGinnis” said the yellow cloaked teen in a sickly tone to Obsidian, looking away right after.
“…Nino Amore…” the girl introduced herself as shyly, hiding her face immediately.
“I’m Obsidian, it’s nice to meet you all, thanks for before, I just got back from fighting them and my Pokemon are very tired at the time.”
“Well, you can stay with us for the night then Obsidian.” Doxis said. “C’mon, back to base everyone.”
Base
The base was sort of like a mansion on the edge of town. There were many rooms, including a huge kitchen, dining room, and even a battle arena. “So, how did you get into that mess Obsidian?” Nicoli asked.
“I was in a battle with them before, which tired me and my Pokemon out, maybe that’s why the leftover grunts were able to catch up with me.”
“I can see, so you’re against Smog it seems.”
“Yes, right now I am against them, why do you ask.”
“We need kids like you, fighters and rebels.”
“Who are you really?”
“We are a group made to stop Smog and destroy it. We are The Cloaks.”
“The Cloaks eh, I’ve heard of them before, each member specializing in a certain type of Pokemon that corresponds with there cloak color. I’m guessing that you are an expert with normal-type Pokemon, right Nicoli.”
“The cloak tells all. Though most of us in this group are getting old, and we would like a young man like you to join, or at least help us in our next raid on the base about ten kilometers from here.”
“I’ll have to think about the invitation, but since I’m just wandering right now, I’ll help you guys with the raid.”
“That’s great Obsidian, go to Nino and she’ll show you to your room for the night…and why don’t you have a shirt on right now?”
“Long story, and thanks, I’ll go to her right now.” Obsidian walked aimlessly around the base until he found the silver cloaked girl. At the time, she wasn’t wearing her cloak, and had a simple silver shirt on with a black mini-skirt. “Um…Nino, Nicoli told me that you knew where I was staying, can you show it to me?”
“..Sure thing,” Nino said as she blushed a bit. She motioned Obsidian to follow as the two teens went to the other side of the base to Obsidian’s room. It was located by a window that looked over the bay. There was a bed, a trashcan, and a shelf to put stuff on in it, very simple.
“Thank you Nino-chan.”
“You’re welcome Obsidian-kun.” Nino then stumbled out of the room.
“Now to get some rest,” Obsidian said as he yawned and fell asleep.
Part Two will be coming shortly. Right now I have some free time and will be writing it as you read this chapter. Hopefully I may be done by the time you all read this. A final note is that the character bios for my characters will be located in the first post when I am finished with part two.
David's Confused Pokedad
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Nice job. Very detailed and thorough. -David
ashinto
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Chapter Three, Part Two
Obsidian awoke to a Raichu’s sharpened tail at the neck. ‘What the hell did I do to deserve this?’
“Stay away from her,” a familiar voice said to him.
“Kertix, is that you?”
“Yes, and stay away from Nino, she’s mine.”
“Dude, I’m not after her, it’s not my fault that she may be infatuated with me.”
“Well, I don’t really care what you say. That whole little thing you did with Smog, you faked being weak. I saw you on the posters in the police stations months ago; you’re one of them, Smooth Demon. You’re foolin’ no one.”
‘Well, it seems that they don’t know it.’ “And if you’ve checked the wanted posters by the taverns and bars recently, you’ve seen that Smog is putting up wanted posters of me because I ‘betrayed’ them. So I am on your side.”
Raichu’s tail went back from Obsidian’s neck to its normal position. “I’m watching you Demon.”
“…I think I gotta go back to bed.” Obsidian says as he falls back and goes to sleep again.
A Couple Hours Later
Obsidian awoke to a note and a shirt on his bed. It read, ‘A gift from us to you.’ The note had signatures from all the Cloak members besides Kertix. ‘Wow, this guy can keep a grudge; I didn’t even do anything to him.’ Obsidian let out his two Pokemon, who along with there owner were rested and ready to fight. “You guys ready to help everyone in the raid tonight?”
“Sel!!”
“Bagon!!”
“Great, now let me talk to all the others to see what the plan is tonight.” Obsidian returned his Pokemon and walked off to the main lobby, all the Cloak members waiting there.
“Obsidian, it’s great that you joined us, now have a seat,” Doxis said to Obsidian kindly.
Obsidian took the only empty chair there, which was next to Nicoli and August.
“Ok guys, the plan tonight is to raid the Smog base tonight. We are going to destroy all food supplies, free any stolen Pokemon, and try to take out there power. Here is a microphone that we can all communicate with. Now for groups. There’s eight of us so we’ll make four groups of two. I’ll go with August. Nicoli, you and Nino will be on the same team. William and Josephine will be a group and that leave Kertix and Obsidian.”
Kertix gave a glare at Obsidian, making him feel uncomfortable.
“Now, I want all of you to get ready for the raid tonight and meet back here at midnight.”
The members of The Cloaks and Obsidian walked off to there separate rooms, getting there stuff ready for the night. As Obsidian made it to his room, he went through his bag for things he may need. ‘New shirt, check, staff, check, Scar and Sel, check, I’m missing something…oh ya, the band.’ Obsidian searched around his bag and found a simple silver ring and put it on. ‘That’s everything…I just wish I had my hat, and my mask, that’s something I should’ve packed before I left, the mask would’ve been nice to hide my face so Smog doesn’t know I’m there, but it seems that once this is out, the Smooth Demon will be heavily hunted on this side of Rennto, I’ll most likely have to start travelling a lot quicker, I hope I get a Pokemon to fly on soon.
Midnight
“Everyone ready?” Doxis asked as they all put there cloaks on.
“Yup,” all the other members and Obsidian piped in as they got with there flying type Pokemon, Obsidian not having one got on Kertix’s Fearow.
“Just a reminder, no straying from your partner, which goes for everyone, even you Obsidian. Now, let’s fly!!”
All of the flying Pokemon lifted off the ground and flew towards the Smog hideout. Doxis and August flew to the western part of the base on there Charizard and Drifblim. Nicoli and Nino flew on there respective Pokemon, a Togekiss for Nicoli and a Skarmory for Nino to the Eastern part. Josephine and William, riding on there Noctowl and Pidgeot had already landed in the southern part, and Obsidian and Kertix flew above the center, making there way to the northern sector of the base. As they did, Obsidian spotted Cronus through a window. ‘He’s mine.’ “Sorry Kertix, but their’s some unfinished business to take care of,” Obsidian said as he fell off of Kertix’s Fearow and did a torpedo dive to the center of the base, turning the mic off.
“What are you doing, you’re with them aren’t you, you are now about to tell them that we’re here, I’m going to kill you Demon, Fearow dive down and follow him!!!” The Fearow dove down as Obsidian’s body crushed through the glass and sent out Scar and Sel, the two Pokemon defending the trainer as he followed Cronus into the Admin’s room.
“Kertix, what’s wrong?” Doxis asked.
“Ya, we can all here you screaming, and we have no sign of him,” Nicoli said.
“That man isn’t against Smog, I didn’t want to tell everyone, but he’s the Smooth Demon, we fell right into his trap too.”
“Kertix, if he is who you think he is, then do not follow him, he’s been known to kill without hesitation and is an “S” ranked trainer right now, you aren’t even close to the B rank, just continue with the plan,” Doxis ordered Kertix.
“To late…” Kertix answered as he turned his mic off and landed in the Smog base and continued to follow Obsidian.
“Kertix, Kertix!!” Doxis screamed. ‘I’ve faced the Smooth Demon once and even with fire-types and out numbering his Pokemon, he still almost killed me, that boy is as good as dead…’
This took me long enough...I'm going to add in the Cronus vs. Obsidian battle which has an epic finish at the end in chapter four, which i shall start writing today. Enjoy!!
Obsidian awoke to a Raichu’s sharpened tail at the neck. ‘What the hell did I do to deserve this?’
“Stay away from her,” a familiar voice said to him.
“Kertix, is that you?”
“Yes, and stay away from Nino, she’s mine.”
“Dude, I’m not after her, it’s not my fault that she may be infatuated with me.”
“Well, I don’t really care what you say. That whole little thing you did with Smog, you faked being weak. I saw you on the posters in the police stations months ago; you’re one of them, Smooth Demon. You’re foolin’ no one.”
‘Well, it seems that they don’t know it.’ “And if you’ve checked the wanted posters by the taverns and bars recently, you’ve seen that Smog is putting up wanted posters of me because I ‘betrayed’ them. So I am on your side.”
Raichu’s tail went back from Obsidian’s neck to its normal position. “I’m watching you Demon.”
“…I think I gotta go back to bed.” Obsidian says as he falls back and goes to sleep again.
A Couple Hours Later
Obsidian awoke to a note and a shirt on his bed. It read, ‘A gift from us to you.’ The note had signatures from all the Cloak members besides Kertix. ‘Wow, this guy can keep a grudge; I didn’t even do anything to him.’ Obsidian let out his two Pokemon, who along with there owner were rested and ready to fight. “You guys ready to help everyone in the raid tonight?”
“Sel!!”
“Bagon!!”
“Great, now let me talk to all the others to see what the plan is tonight.” Obsidian returned his Pokemon and walked off to the main lobby, all the Cloak members waiting there.
“Obsidian, it’s great that you joined us, now have a seat,” Doxis said to Obsidian kindly.
Obsidian took the only empty chair there, which was next to Nicoli and August.
“Ok guys, the plan tonight is to raid the Smog base tonight. We are going to destroy all food supplies, free any stolen Pokemon, and try to take out there power. Here is a microphone that we can all communicate with. Now for groups. There’s eight of us so we’ll make four groups of two. I’ll go with August. Nicoli, you and Nino will be on the same team. William and Josephine will be a group and that leave Kertix and Obsidian.”
Kertix gave a glare at Obsidian, making him feel uncomfortable.
“Now, I want all of you to get ready for the raid tonight and meet back here at midnight.”
The members of The Cloaks and Obsidian walked off to there separate rooms, getting there stuff ready for the night. As Obsidian made it to his room, he went through his bag for things he may need. ‘New shirt, check, staff, check, Scar and Sel, check, I’m missing something…oh ya, the band.’ Obsidian searched around his bag and found a simple silver ring and put it on. ‘That’s everything…I just wish I had my hat, and my mask, that’s something I should’ve packed before I left, the mask would’ve been nice to hide my face so Smog doesn’t know I’m there, but it seems that once this is out, the Smooth Demon will be heavily hunted on this side of Rennto, I’ll most likely have to start travelling a lot quicker, I hope I get a Pokemon to fly on soon.
Midnight
“Everyone ready?” Doxis asked as they all put there cloaks on.
“Yup,” all the other members and Obsidian piped in as they got with there flying type Pokemon, Obsidian not having one got on Kertix’s Fearow.
“Just a reminder, no straying from your partner, which goes for everyone, even you Obsidian. Now, let’s fly!!”
All of the flying Pokemon lifted off the ground and flew towards the Smog hideout. Doxis and August flew to the western part of the base on there Charizard and Drifblim. Nicoli and Nino flew on there respective Pokemon, a Togekiss for Nicoli and a Skarmory for Nino to the Eastern part. Josephine and William, riding on there Noctowl and Pidgeot had already landed in the southern part, and Obsidian and Kertix flew above the center, making there way to the northern sector of the base. As they did, Obsidian spotted Cronus through a window. ‘He’s mine.’ “Sorry Kertix, but their’s some unfinished business to take care of,” Obsidian said as he fell off of Kertix’s Fearow and did a torpedo dive to the center of the base, turning the mic off.
“What are you doing, you’re with them aren’t you, you are now about to tell them that we’re here, I’m going to kill you Demon, Fearow dive down and follow him!!!” The Fearow dove down as Obsidian’s body crushed through the glass and sent out Scar and Sel, the two Pokemon defending the trainer as he followed Cronus into the Admin’s room.
“Kertix, what’s wrong?” Doxis asked.
“Ya, we can all here you screaming, and we have no sign of him,” Nicoli said.
“That man isn’t against Smog, I didn’t want to tell everyone, but he’s the Smooth Demon, we fell right into his trap too.”
“Kertix, if he is who you think he is, then do not follow him, he’s been known to kill without hesitation and is an “S” ranked trainer right now, you aren’t even close to the B rank, just continue with the plan,” Doxis ordered Kertix.
“To late…” Kertix answered as he turned his mic off and landed in the Smog base and continued to follow Obsidian.
“Kertix, Kertix!!” Doxis screamed. ‘I’ve faced the Smooth Demon once and even with fire-types and out numbering his Pokemon, he still almost killed me, that boy is as good as dead…’
This took me long enough...I'm going to add in the Cronus vs. Obsidian battle which has an epic finish at the end in chapter four, which i shall start writing today. Enjoy!!
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also good, however i just noticed a few grammar errors that should be pointed out. Ok, one type of error but in many places. most of the time when you say "there" it should be "their" to signify that they own it or whatever and not referring to a place.:biggrin:
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David's Confused Pokedad
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....Awesome. The Cloaks should be interesting personalities. Good work. -David
David's Confused Pokedad
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When's Chap. 4 coming? Estimate please, I don't want to rush it. -David