Pokémon TCG: Sword and Shield—Brilliant Stars

The Legend of Thunder: Updated 6/8 Now truly complete!

Yes, I know the chapters are short. I was waiting for a reply from crystal hikara for something I might have done. BTW, it won't be done.
So a Level 25 Pikachu is leader of the Clan? Makes no sense. What's this world coming to?
That's what the clan thinks. Most of them are supposed to be mid 30s. Why would they bother to get higher? there isn't anything that could threaten them, the only thing to work for is leader really. Don't worry, chapter four should be up by next week at most, and it will be longer and less boring.
 
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"Deciding that the first thing he would do that morning would be to find out what all the commotion was about, he walked out of his nest"
This is a sort of bland statement, because there would be nothing else to really do.
 
So, there is no outside threat? No reason to become more powerful? They're living in a wild forest, yet nothing can harm them? Maybe you should put an outside threat. That would make being powerful have a purpose.

And aren't there any older, more experienced Pikachus at higher levels that 30? If so, how can they not beat Thunder?
 
"Deciding that the first thing he would do that morning would be to find out what all the commotion was about, he walked out of his nest"
He could have gone back to sleep.
So, there is no outside threat? No reason to become more powerful? They're living in a wild forest, yet nothing can harm them? Maybe you should put an outside threat. That would make being powerful have a purpose.
Maybe you should wait until chapter 4.
And aren't there any older, more experienced Pikachus at higher levels that 30? If so, how can they not beat Thunder?
Just wait. I've given a little hint in post #19. If you can figure it out before chapter 4 is up, then your name can be in the story.
 
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No. The reason is why he can break boulders. Though I guess any pokemon can break boulders as long as it knows rock smash.:lol: Guess again.
 
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O.K. Meditite rox gets his name in the story because he was the only one that guessed. I've decided to keep the chapters short, but a little longer then what I've been doing, because unlike R Q O and others, this isn't supposed to be a really long story. But here's chapter 4, enjoy.

Chapter 4​
When dusk cast its long shadows over the deciduous forest the Pikachus called their home, all of the clan had gathered around the dusty clearing, waiting for the battle to start. As Thunder prepared to fight, he saw Pidgeys flying up and away from a particular section of the woods. Paying no attention to this, his gaze turned to Spark, who was anxiously awaiting the gold one to star the fight. “I’ll give you this one chance to withdraw your challenge” said Thunder. But the Raichu just wiggled his tail in a “come and get me” motion. Taking that as a no, Thunder said the words that Spark had been waiting to hear “Then let our battle begin.” Wasting no time, Spark dashed forward in a Quick Attack, but instead of counter attacking, Thunder just stood there, apparently lost in thought. Hitting his target, the Raichu slid back, raising thick clouds of dust into the air. “Thinking about what you’ll do once you lose?” taunted Spark “Thinking at a time like this, you always were the odd one.” But Thunder was oblivious to these taunts, apparently still thinking. Seeing this, the enraged Raichu sent a Thunder Bolt at his leader, expecting him to cry out in pain when it hit, but it never did. At that moment, the gold Pikachu snapped out of his thoughts, and seeing the Raichu’s attack heading towards him, sent a Thunder Bolt of his own at it. If Spark was confident that his attack would stop, in not go through his leader’s, he was wrong. Thunder’s attack ripped through his like tissue paper, hitting him squarely on the chest and sending him flying into an oak tree on the other side of the clearing. “I don’t get it” he said “I’m five levels higher then you! How can your attack go through mine so easily?” Then Thunder decided to reveal his secret, “I waited to evolve from Pichu to Pikachu for a reason. I wanted to master a move that no one else in this clan has ever bothered to. This move is Nasty Plot. It doubles my special attack, making me more powerful than you.” Hearing this, Spark inwardly groaned, but instead of saying anything, he just launched himself into a Slam attack, which Thunder easily avoided. “It’s not so easy to hit me now, Spark.” he said, as he started using Double Team. But the Raichu just used Thunder Bolt to hit all of the Thunders that surrounded him, including the real one. When the gold Pikachu didn’t get up, Spark realized that he had gotten a critical hit, and had won out of luck, but he didn’t say this to the cheering spectators as he went to celebrate his victory and position as new clan leader. In fact, the only Pikachu who went over to see if the ex-leader was alright, was Lightning. “Thunder! Are you o.k.?” she cried. But he already was on his feet, almost steaming with rage as he snapped “Of course I’m not o.k.! I just lost the battle and leadership over the clan! And to make it worse, I lost to Spark! So, no, I’m not o.k.” Lightning just stood there, looking like she was on the verge of tears. But then her eyes hardened and without another word, dashed off into the woods, kicking dirt into Thunder’s eyes. When his vision finally cleared, she was gone. But before he could chase after her, a Rattata stumbled breathlessly into the clearing, saying one thing over and over “The Rockets are here!”

I know, team rocket isn't original, but I can't think of anything else right now. As always, please review.
 
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Ok. Before I even think about writing chapter 5, I need to know if anybody is even reading this. If nobody is, then I'll just (as much as I would hate to) discontinue it. I'll give you people a week after I post chapter 5, which still needs to be written, and if nobody has posted, I'll ask a mod to lock this and forget about the story.
 
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I'm reading it! XD

Okay, I think you should space it out a little more, with more paragraphs and awsome stuff like that.

Also, when a character speaks, it needs to be in a new paragraph. Like this:

"I'll give you this one chance to withdraw your challenge," Thunder said.

But the Raichu just wagged his tail in a "come and get me" motion. Taking that as a no, Thunder said the words Spark had been waiting to hear.

"Then let our battle begin..."

And continue on like that. I find it harder to read when it's all bunched together in one paragraph.
 
Ok, thanks. Nice to know somebody is reading it and wants to know what happens.:thumb: I'll try to do that. I'll start writing chapter 5 now.
 
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^ IDK. I'm starting school, so it will be harder for me to find time to force myself to write it.:thumb: Yes, both rox bros who are reading this can be in, but neither of you will like it.:wink: Arceus 999, PM me with your name, and I'll try to fit in something nasty for you.:tongue:
 
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