Ive covered how many people did not post/post effective constructive criticism. grassmaster did laugh at his embarrasment. It is painful to him. he made one response that might have been offensive, and it was because jaegar was posting in a rude way. to the guy who is 22, you are 8 years older than him. If you were caught in public talking to a fourteen year-old boy like that how do you think people around you would think of you? many people thought this article was an interesting read. I thought it was well written for an eigth grader. and stop trying to avoid being responsible for making this kid feel bad. its not right, many of you were responsible. I hope my article on how to post constructive criticism will be on front page soon. Rikko, I thought you did a fine job on your first article, and I hope you continue to persue your writing career. Best of luck
I wanted to help him, until he posted the text I quoted above. A whiner who gets depressed because his poorly thought-out article is criticized, on the internet of all places, is not somebody who should be writing articles for a website of this caliber.
You can still say his article was bad but 8-10 people thought it was a good read that is what the front page is for, it was probably moved to the deck help and strategy because people kept flaming and demanding that when I don't think it was truely needed, yes he does point out his age but when a 22 year old is doing that to a 14 year-old that is not right It would not be exepted in public so why do it here, and I have read your articles and they are not as well written as mine or others people have wrote. writing is for the entertainment of others and self-enjoyment, and with your next post please don't keep saying the same thing. If you think its bad we heard you. I can probably qoute more offensive things you guys have posted then you could find but please go ahead and try to prove me wrong
Is this directed at me? I haven't written any articles in a long time?[/QUOTE]
Why are you asking? If this is sarcasm it really went over my head.
Is this directed at me? I haven't written any articles in a long time?[/QUOTE]
Why are you asking? If this is sarcasm it really went over my head.
Becuase I was trying to figure out who he was talking about, and what makes you think that was sarcasm?
Becuase I was trying to figure out who he was talking about, and what makes you think that was sarcasm?
It just sounds like sarcasm when you put it as a question. So, what do you say we all just bury the hatchets and move on? :redface:
no it wasn't, it was to Box of Fail
Your Introduction is good, explaining the Darkrai X was nice, but you should link the cards. Your putting to much on 1 BR win, it takes away from you as an author since you constantly try to validate your deck. I would remove all your OMG I won BR related comments and instead at the bottom create a new subheading and list accomplishments under this I would list your 1 BR win and if there is any other people that did well with the deck you can list it there to. I would only list BR and up level tournaments. League, locals, and play testing mean nothing as far as validating a deck. You need more detail as far as your deck goes, explaining why some cards are than there expecially more off the wall choices like SSU and Snowpoint Temple gives people a better idea of where you are coming from. Also if you tech certain cards for certian match ups this is also worth listing. I find it very hard to believe that you can constantly get a Turn 2 Togekiss with 1 BTS and only 2 Rare Candy. I would write your stradgey alittle differently. First I would write a small introduction and than I would explain your stradgey against each of the top 3-5 decks or so. Your varations section was good but simply lacks detail, going into more detail, giving suggestions on what to put in and take out if the reader would like to tech against certian decks for his meta I think is a must. All your credits is you bragging. I would rewrite the whole credits, credits are supposed to be where you thank people who helped you write the article, people who helped and gave you suggestions on the deck, or you took different ideas from. I also believe it is important to talk about your decks weaknesses, if your willing to admit your decks flaws this gives you far more credit as a author, talking about how cards like Promo Toxicroak and Warp Point hurt you and why also really helps your reader have a better understanding of the deck and what to watch out for.
Sadly Match ups are a lose-lose situation, from what I've seen usually 1 of 2 things happen either A the author is so biased for there deck, almost all their match ups are "positive or autowins" or B reader is hey I beat my friend playing a deck like this easily so your match up is obivously wrong. To be honest its usually a combination of both. Either way their is alot of controversy, but at the same point in time if you don't put match ups than you look like you don't want to admit how bad your match ups are. Also your article seems far less complete. Expect Controversey here, you knew this before you wrote the article, if this is something you can't or don't want to deal with, than to be honest its not a good idea to write articles.
I think you've got a good start but this looks like a rough draft, with a little more work you could have a nice article.
I've said it before and I'll say it again I'm not against "fun deck" articles being on the front page if they are well written.
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How can you possibly sit there and say you shouldn't make fun of a 14 year old kid online and that we should feel ashamed of ourselves when you turn around and just told box of fail, a 14 year old kid his articles aren't very good?
I think the article is much better. The matchups had more explanation.
I don't agree with your match ups (aka the unavoidable controversey) however you did a much better job of explaining them, and going into what advantages and disadvantages you have in each match up. The only other I will say is the Togekiss, for my point I never said you can't get it out, I said with a 2-1-2 and only 1 BTS and 2 Candy doing it consistantly on turn 2 is unlikely.
I think it is much better, I would PM a mod and have them look at your updated article, they will probably have a few more things for you to do, but your probably aren't to far off from getting back on the front page.
Thanks! And I'll look into some scans if I can!
If you have a scanner then you could scan them onto photobucket and upload them..