Burninating_Torchic
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yeah, sorry 'bout that type fluke, wasn't thinking right, I'm just gonna go with that she specially trained her skarmory after getting it beat by electrics so many times before, XD
AreYouHappy said:Very dynamic, lot's of stuff happening but I can still understand it! Good job!
I am one of these 'kids from my school' I think I'm the only girl... o.0 Unless I'm wrong. Then I'm not the only girl...
Are you happy?
From:
Chapter 7
Ignore Them!
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"Waaah!" Ryan screamed, falling from the ceiling in the meeting room. Of all the places to teleport to when he used the teleportation device Giovanni gave him to get away from the rebellion base. He landed on the large oval shaped table, and luckily, noone was in that meeting room at the time. "Whew." He said, for he had not damaged any part of his body. "Now I better get out-" Suddenly, he heard voices coming from the meeting room next door. He walked up to the wall and put his ear to it, listening.
"So, Blaine, Team Rocket is now proceeding to capture Johto, are they not?" An unfamiliar voice came from the room.
"Indeed." Blaine replied. "They have already hypnotized the 6 other Kanto gym leaders, and believe I am on their side as well."
"Magnificent. Continue to lead them on with the plan. I will allow you to hypnotize 4 of the 8 Johto Gym Leaders. Take your picks now." The voice replied.
from:
Chapter 7
Ignore Them!
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"Waaah!" Ryan screamed, falling from the ceiling in the meeting room. Of all the places to teleport to when he used the teleportation device Giovanni gave him to get away from the rebellion base. He landed on the large oval shaped table, and luckily, noone was in that meeting room at the time.
"Whew." He said, for he had not damaged any part of his body. "Now I better get out-" Suddenly, he heard voices coming from the meeting room next door. He walked up to the wall and put his ear to it, listening.
"So, Blaine, Team Rocket is now proceeding to capture Johto, are they not?" An unfamiliar voice came from the room.
"Indeed." Blaine replied. "They have already hypnotized the 6 other Kanto gym leaders, and believe I am on their side as well."
"Magnificent. Continue to lead them on with the plan. I will allow you to hypnotize 4 of the 8 Johto Gym Leaders. Take your picks now." The voice replied.
Cardzmaster2004 said:BT: Point taken, but still. most prose today starts a new paragraph each time another person begins to talk. Read anything by Dickens, Card, or any major write of fiction and you'll see this is true. whether you change the style or not is up to you, but I think it makes it a bit more readable. But that's just me. Don't change the whole thing for one person if you don't want to.
Hmm, maybe I'll jsut go ahead and start reposting my fic sometime soon. Sure, it'll just be a repost, but there needs to be some CaC representation in here. Anyone want to see it?
Waliken said:BT. as you said at the beginning of your last chapter you met me at nats and i said i liked your fic. i have a question though. how many more chapters do you plan on writing?
Charizardian said:Well it ain't bad, but some quotes are pretty stupid and unneccesary.